The experience to work for a big business with such
a good reputation is something I always wanted to have. Working with a multinational
team is exactly what I want, so I can improve my English skills even more. The Roche
AG is a company which lays a big value to permanent further training just like
me. I want this job, because I see this internship as a start for my career and
not the definition of it. 

Wie ist diese Version? :)
Danke im Voraus für das korrigieren.

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Hier wäre noch der Rest vom Bewerbungsschreiben, falls irgendwer selber Hilfe braucht bei einem ähnlichem Problem :)

Dear Ms. XX,

I will graduate in September 2018 from the XX
School of Life Sciences in XX with a BSc in pharma technologies. I read about your opening for a Student Internship in Pharma Informatics on www.roche.ch and
I am very interested in the possibilities it offers. I am writing to explore
the opportunity for employment with Roche AG.

Thanks to my work for the omniCon I made some
contacts with Roche employees which recommended the employment. The experience
to work for a big business with such a good reputation is something I always
wanted to have. Now, I saw your ad in my preferred field of interest and it’s also
a student internship. I want this job, because I see this internship as a start
for a productive collaboration with my favourite company.

*** why I want to work for Roche, why I want this
job*** <-- vom prof reingeschrieben

The advertisement indicated that you are looking
for someone capable of analysing complex data and present them in a way that is
easy to understand. I think my resume outlines an education history that you
will find matches the open position. During my studies I worked on several
projects with different kinds of data to analyse. Through those projects I
gained experience in data handling and presenting and I have a talent for
statistics. Now I would like to put these skills into practice in industry.

My degree included a variety of theoretical courses
as well as a great deal of laboratory experience, including programming in Java
and python. As I see from your announcement, you want experience in SQL which I
have thanks to the data management module. I am used to stress, focused and work
accurately even under time constraints. Also, I like to take responsibility and
hope that I can further develop myself.

As you will see by the enclosed resume, I have had
considerable data handling experience here at the XX and I am thoroughly
familiar with some of the data languages you mention in your ad. In addition, I
have excellent computer skills.

Thank you in advance for checking my documents. In
the meantime, if you have any questions or require additional information do
not hesitate to contact me.

Yours sincerely,

XX

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Gute Grafikkarte/ Prozessor sind wichtig.

Als Grafikkarte finde ich die 670 GTX vom Preisleistungsverhältnis die beste.

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Der ist schon auf deinem PC Installiert

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Bist du sicher dass sie wegen der Schule weint? So schlimm hört sich das ja gar nicht an wenn sie dort Freunde hat. Frag sie doch mal warum sie weint.

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Also beim Dritten sehe ich die Grafikkarte nicht (ist sehr wichtig für Spiele) Aber von den beiden ersten welche die gleiche Grafikkarte besitzen empfehl ich dir den zweiten mit dem Ivy-bridge Prozessor. Der ist neuer und trifft deine Aussage "Zukunftssicher" eher. Ausserdem empfehle ich für Laptops immer den ;) Energiesparender und leistungsstarker. Nur musst du beim 2ten Laptop gucken ob du ihn auch mit 1000GB Speicherplatz bekommst. 500GB sind je nach Nutzer relativ schnell voll.

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Viele Mädchen (Jünger) lieben ihn weil er aussieht wie ein "bubi". Diese wissen nicht wie man lieder runterladen kann und hören ihn halt über youtube... MEINE Meinung. Ich finde es schon ein bisschen komisch das er kleine Mädchen ausnützt ( seine Fangemeinde besteht aus denen) ;)

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