Austauschjahr Usa Gastfamilienbrief

Hallo, Ich möchte nächstes Jahr ein Jahr in die USA und ich bin gerade dabei mich zu bewerben. Nun muss ich einen Brief an die Gastfamilie schreiben und ich weiß nicht ob er gut ist und ob da Fehler drinne sind? Ich hoffe ihr könnt mir helfen. Ich bedanke mich schonmal. Hier ist der Brief:

Dear host family,

first of all I want to say thank you for giving me the opportunity to spend a year in the USA with you and to be a part of your family. In this letter I try to give you an impression of my personality and to introduce myself, my family, the things I typically do and the place where I live.

My name is Tamara and I'm a 16 years old girl from Germany. I live in a small village near ***. I live alone with my mother in a nice apartment. My older brother **** doesn't live at home because he moved on when he was 16. He works as a market manager. My grandparents live near my mother and me.

My family is very important for me and we spend a lot of time together. My mother is a really good cook, she writes a lot and she likes earrings and especially shoes. Sometimes I help her to make earrings. I see my brother once a week because he didn't live very far away. Once a year we go on vacation. We have stayed in many places like Turkey, Spain, Tunisia, Italy and other places in Europe.

I love music so I listen to music very often. I play guitar since a year and I sing but I'm not in any band. I'm not a professional so I'm still learning. I write songs by myself, most in English and it makes really fun. I often meet my friends and then we talk or we going shopping or we do something else. Sometimes I do nothing and just relax but this is rare.

I go in10th grade in school. My school is about 15 minutes away from me so I walk to school. My school isn't so big, there are 300-400 students. Mostly I like school because I can see my friends and my favorite classes are Music, English and German.

The USA fascinates me already for a long time. It's a many sided country with a colorful landscape and many different people. In Europe you always hear about the American Way Of Life and you also hear about the school spirit there and I want to experience all that and want to be a part of it. But there is so much more I could discover and learn about the country so I want to learn about the culture and the traditions of the USA. In an exchange year I could collect so many important experiences for my future life and I want to grow up with my personality and become more open-minded. I would like to meet new people and make friends and I would like to find a second family.

I'm a friendly person who like to help other people and who is a good listener. I'm open for new experience, adaptable and inquisitive.

I'm finishing my letter now and I want to thank you again for giving me the chance to spend a year in the USA, it's a big dream of mine

love greetings

Tamara

Answer 1

[needman96]

Jo passt aber mit 16 allein in die usa oder hab ich das falsch verstanden

Answer 2

[genuinebeauty]

Im zweiten Absatz meinst du sicher: 'he moved out'. Im dritten Absatz: because he doesn't .. Im dritten Absatz: We have stayed at many places. Absatz 4: we go shopping. Absatz 5: entweder: 'I am in the 10th grade in school.' oder: 'I'm visiting the 10th grade.' Absatz 5: ... is about 15 minutes away from my place/house/location. das "from me" bezieht sich eher auf einen aktuellen Standpunkt. Absatz 6: The USA have already been fascinating me for a long time. Absatz 6: many-sided (Bindestrich) Absatz 7: ... who likes to help (s muss mit)

Comments

[sweety12345677]

Danke, das war sehr hilfreich

Answer 3

[LilliSpain]

Hi, ich habe vor 5 Jahren ein Austauschjahr gemacht und ich hoffe ich kann dir helfen.

Eine Frage, hast du eine eigene Gastfamilie oder bekommst du sie via Organisation vermittelt? Wenn du sie noch nicht hast, musst du Anfang und Ende etwas umschreiben. Den Brief bekommen die Gastfamilien oft schon vorgelegt, bevor sie sich ihren Austauschschüler ausgesucht haben. Sprich sie haben ca. 10 solche Briefe zuhause und lesen sie durch und entscheiden erst dann ob sie dich nehmen oder nicht.

Da solltest am Anfang eher schreiben, danke, dass ihr euch Zeit nehmt, um meinen Brief zu lesen. Und Am Schluss, nochmal danke, dass ihr euch die Zeit genommen habt, ich hoffe der Brief hat euch gefallen.

Das wäre das einzige was ich zu bemänglen hätte. Die Fehler hat genuinebeauty ja schon umgebessert.

Comments

[sweety12345677]

Ich bekomme eine Gastfamilie von der Organisation vermittelt. Dankeschön