Ist der Text (Englisch) so korrekt?

Hallo, ich mache bald ein Auslandsjahr und musste für die Bewerbung 6 Fotos hinzufügen und diese kurz beschreiben, könnte bitte jemand diese Texte korrektur lesen? Ich möchte wirklich keine Fehler drin haben, da dies die Gastfamile bekommt. Bitte wundert euch nicht, es sind natürlich auch Namen im Text, diese werde ich hier aber entfernen!

That is me with my Dad. I was with my family this winter over New Year`s Eve in Austria. It was my first ski holiday with my family, before I was two times with my school on a trip to Austria, there I lerned to drive Ski. We had a lot of fun.

That is a pic from my sister and me. It was taken at my confirmation in spring 2016. It was a really great day, that I spend with my family.

In this picture you see my little cousin (name). He was born at the (geburtstag) 2017. I spend a lot of time with him, so I often baby-sitting him. I am also the godaunt of him, and I´m so lucky about that.

That is my family. On the right you see my Dad (name). At his left side you see my sister name, she is 18 years old. At the left side you see my mother name and me. This picture was taken in Mallorca, 2016. Our holiday was great, and we saw a lot of amazing places.

That is a cake that I baked for Christmas 2017. I really often bake for some family celebration, I started it 2014. The biggest cake was the weddingcake for my aunt and my uncle. It was really tricky to bake that, but my mum and my grandma helped me.

That is my dog Tinka, we have her since 2012, now she is circa 7 years old. I also have eight chicken and some fishs in our garden. I also had some rabbits, guinea pigsand mouses.

Danke!

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That is me with my Dad. I was with my family this winter over New Year`s Eve in Austria. It was my first ski holiday with my family. Before I was two times with my school on a trip to Austria, I learned to drive Ski there. We had a lot of fun.

That is a pic from my sister and me. It was taken at my confirmation in spring 2016. It was a really great day, that I spend with my family.

In this picture you can see my little cousin (name). He was born at the (geburtstag) 2017. I spend a lot of time with him, so I often baby-sitting him. I am also the godaunt of him, and I´m so happy about that.

That is my family. On the right you see my Dad (name). At his left side you see my sister name, she is 18 years old. At the left side you see my mother name and me. This picture was taken in Mallorca, 2016. Our holiday was great, and we saw a lot of amazing places.

That is a cake that I baked for Christmas 2017. I really often bake for some family celebration. I started it 2014. The biggest cake was the weddingcake for my aunt and my uncle. It was really tricky to bake that, but my mum and my grandma helped me.

That is my dog Tinka, we have her since 2012, now she is circa 7 years old. I also have eight chicken and some fishs in our garden. I also had some rabbits, guinea pigsand mouses.

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