Englisch Dezentrale Prüfung verbessern :)

Hallo Also ich bin in der 9 Klasse und hab jetzt meine Dezentrale Mündliche Prüfung. Hab einen Text Über mich also 'About Myself' geschrieben. Meine Lehrerin hat den Text als sehr gut empfunden aber hat gesagt ich sollte ihn noch von irgendjemanden aus meinem Kreis verbessern lassen, da sie das als Prüferin nicht machen darf. Aber ich hab leider neimanden in der nähe der gut Englisch kann.Jetzt ist die Frage ob jemand hier meine Englisch Prüfung Kostenlos Verbessern kann, oder gibt es seiten wo mann das Kostenlos machen kann? Das währe nämlich eine riiiiesen Hilfe. Hello my name is Selina and I want to tell you something about myself. I'm 15 years old and I live in x, But in 1-2 months my family and I want to removal to x.I have a sister called Lea. She is 13 years old and goes to school. I also have a half brother. His name is Giuseppe , he is 26 years old and he goes to a study. My father's name is Jürgen. He is 56 years old and works at CWG Gosheim. My mother's name is Angela . She is 52 years old and works as an Housewife. I love my family because when we are together we have so much fun. If I have a problem I can go to my mother or my father. Thats really nice. My school is in x. I go to this School since the 5th grade. But in the 7th grade I was half a year at Realschule . But this half-year was not so good because my grades are really bad and then I came back to the Werkrealschule. In the Realschule are the Teachers really unfriendly and they don’t explain things often. In The WRS they Teachers explain things oftener and really help the pupils and that's good. My favourite music star is Ed Sheeran , a English rap/indie star. He is 25 years old and was born in Halifax, England on the 17th February 1991. He writes the Songs: The A Team, Thinking out loud Lego House and lots of other wonderful Songs. When I am sad or angry I listen to Heavy metal or Hard Rock. In this category my favorite bands are 'Bring me the horizon' and 'Asking Alexandria'. My favorite song from Bring me the Horizon is 'Can you feel my heart' and from Asking Alexandria is it 'The Death of me'.In my free time, I go out, go jogging, or go shopping. I love shopping so much, because I can never have enough clothes. When it is Summer I often go out with my Dog or I play with my dog in the garden. If its really hot outside my friends and me sometimes going to the out door pool. In the Winter I sit in front of my Computer and go to Tumblr, drink a Kakao and watch to my favorite YouTube Stars like Sami Slimani, Ischtar Isik or BeautyPeachiii.At the Moment I live in a big house, in x, but my room is small and the walls are painted in white and red colour. In my room is an PC, a chair, a bed, a wardrobe , pictures of my friends and a mirror on my wall. I like my room, because it's a place where I can relax the whole day. If I had time for that. I often read a book or listen to music in my room. I have a lots of memories. (der weitere teil ist schon ver.) Liebe Grüße Selina. :)

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Hello,

My name is Selina and I would like to tell you something about myself. I'm 15 years old and I live in x, but in 1-2 months my family and I want to move to x. I have a sister called Lea. She is 13 years old and goes to school. I also have a half brother. His name is Giuseppe, he is 26 years old and he's at university. My father's name is Jürgen. He is 56 years old and works at CWG Gosheim. My mother's name is Angela. She is 52 years old and is a housewife. I love my family because when we are together we have so much fun. If I have a problem, I can go to my mother or my father, which is really nice. 

My school is in x. I go to this school since the 5th grade, but in the 7th grade I was at "Realschule" for half a year. This half-year was not so good because my grades were really bad and then I came back to the Werkrealschule. In the Realschule the teachers are really unfriendly and they don’t explain things often. In the WRS the teachers explain things more often and really help the pupils and that's good.

My favourite music star is Ed Sheeran, an English rap/indie star. He is 25 years old and was born in Halifax, England on the 17th of February 1991. He wrote the songs: "The A Team", "Thinking out loud", "Lego House" and lots of other wonderful songs. When I am sad or angry I listen to heavy metal or hard rock. In this category my favorite bands are 'Bring Me the Horizon' and 'Asking Alexandria'. My favorite song from Bring Me the Horizon is "Can you feel my heart" and from Asking Alexandria it's "The Death of me". 

In my free time, I go out, go jogging, or go shopping. I love shopping very much, because I can never have enough clothes. When it's summer I often go out with my dog or I play with my dog in the garden. If it's really hot outside my friends and I sometimes go to the outdoor pool. In the winter I sit in front of my computer and go to tumblr, drink a hot chocolate and watch my favorite YouTube Stars like 'Sami Slimani', 'Ischtar Isik' or 'BeautyPeachiii'. At the moment I live in a big house in x, but my room is small. The walls are painted in white and red colour. In my room there is a PC on a desk, a chair, a bed, a wardrobe, pictures of my friends and a mirror on the wall. I like my room, because it's a place where I could relax the whole day, if I had time for that. I often read a book or listen to music in my room. I have lots of memories (there?).

Ich hoffe, das hilft. Wahrscheinlich habe ich nicht alles gesehen. Das "there" am Ende geht davon aus, dass du meinst, dass du viele Erinnerungen in deinem Zimmer gemacht hast und nicht einfach noch viele Erinnerungen hast :)

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