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Hello, I am XXX. I am 13 years old. I live in Essen, which is in the near of Dortmund. My star seign is leo and I have on 29 August birthday. Now, I'll tell you something from my school. My school is called XXX, which is located in Essen. I love my school because I have such nice teachers. My favorite teachers are XX , XXX , XXX and XXX. My friends arte the best, I can not list them because there are too many. My favorite subjects are English,French,physics and math. I love my school and I'm happy with it. Now, we come to my family. I love them so much. My mum is called XXX, she is 38 years old and she is from Poland. My dad is called XXX. He is 43 years old and he's from Turkey. My little brother ist called XXX, who is 10 years old. He loves football very much. I have a little rabbit , too. His name is Timmy and has white fur and blue/grey eyes.I love him so much, my cutie. :) Now , I'll tell you something about me. My hobbies are playing football,table tennis, listen to music and meet with my friends. My eye color is green and a bit brown. My hair color is brown. I am 1 meter and 65 cm tall. My favorite color is light blue, I love it. My favorite food is lasagne, and my favorite drink is apple juice. My motto is: ,, Every day when you don't smile, is a lost day.” Now you know everything important about me.

Danke für das Durchlesen,,und ich hoffe ich bekomme hilfreiche Antworten!:)

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Hi, ein kleiner tipp : du hast immer geschrieben: ,,Now, I'll tell you...'' ich würde vielleicht nach dem Du den Satz vor dem ,,Now'' beendet hast einfach einen Absatz machen. ( aber auch nicht immer ) Und Du hast einmal geschrieben: ,,My star (...) and I have on 29 August birthday'' Ich würde schreiben: and my birthday is on 29 August. Sonst ist das eigentl. ganz gut

LG Pauuuliiiii

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