Hallo, würde eventuell jemand der gerade Zeit hat über meine E-Mail schauen. Die Email ergibt vom Inhalt vielleicht nicht viel Sinn, aber ich wollte mal schauen ob sich meine Grammatik etwas verbessert hat:)

Dear ...,

How are you? I want to point out an important matter that includes you. I have heard that you have rejected an offer from the new student. So it was up to me to confront you. I know that maybe you think it is not my business, but I am your friend. So I want to make a proposal. You accept the offer, because I don't want you to live in guilty of the rest of your life.