Hey ya- outkast

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Ist das okay? (Bild)! Hilfe leute!?

Hi leute! Ich bin 17 und gehe noch in die Schule! Ist es okay geschrieben? "I think, it would be great, if magazines would show the realistic body of a woman on their covers. Since them women looking all flawless and stuff, I think an average woman, will always feel desparated because she'll never look like a magazine covergirl. They're havin flawless skin and with 'flawless' I mean really flawless. No acne, no pimples, no blackheads. Let's talk about the body. Babyskin, no unwanted hair, no stretching marks, no cellulite, flat belly, soft and shiny skin!... Everything on the right place! But a real woman isn't like these women. They can't have a flawless skin, no. They grow hair on the same places a man grows it... But since we're expected to remove our hair everywhere but on our head, just to look ladylike so men would like us more. It ain't right. Some women are starving basically, cause they have to remove their hair almost everyday. Humans are just like animals with less thick fur. You wouldn't shame a female animal for having as much fur as a male one, so stop doing that with humans. Plucking,waxing, epilating, shaving, it all takes time and it hurts like hell.
I think, women are represented not right. The media shows us the wrong version of an ordinary woman. It would be great, if someone would dare, to cover a magazine just like they are. No Photoshop, no nothing... Ladies embrace yourself, be yourself and do the fukk you want. This "how to be a proper woman" thing ain't a thing but shit and a huge lie. ✖️ big love..." Danke im Voraus:)

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Inhaltlich top! stimme dir völlig zu bis auf den Tierteil, welcher grenzwertig auf mich wirkte...ich muss jedoch sagen, dass es bei der Grammatik definitiv noch hapert...
vieles ist einfach 1 zu 1 übersetzt vorallem Redewendung die man nicht auf englisch übersetzen kann:/
Und noch ein letzter Tipp:
benutze (vorallem in der Schule) die ausgeschriebenen Formen und vermeide "slang",abkürzungen und unagebrachte Sprache---> „do whatever the FUK u want" und ao wirkt unangebracht
Versteh mich jetzt nicht falsch, das ist kein hate, nur konstruktive Kritik damit du dein Text noch verbessern kannts
xx

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