PauLii2303
06.03.2010, 23:00
Englisch Simple Past

Huhu brauche Hilfe, ist der Text richtig in Simple past?

Last sunday it was cery hot. There were a lot of people on the beach. They were enjoying the sun. Jill was playing in the sea. Suddenly "comes"? a big wave and "took" her breath away. She couldn't "swam"? "swimming"? back to the beach. But the lifesavers have noticed her. One oft them was swimming out to Jill. He has catched hold of her. They were pulled back to the beach on the rope.

Ist das richtig so? Vllt kleine fehler drin?

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von evanescence
06.03.2010, 23:04

also am ende verwendest du keine simple past..

und ja, es sind mehrere fehler drinnen (zB: suddenly a big wave came; she couldn't swimm, it was very hot,..) und ein paar mal versteh ich nicht was du ausdrücken willst.

am besten verbindest du die sätze noch ein bisschen, damit der stil besser wirkt.

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