Englisch Text über Civil War auf Fehlern lesen?

Hey :) Ich habe auf englisch eine lineare Erörterung zu dem Civil War schreiben müssen und wäre super froh wenn jemand das durchliest und nach Fehlern schaut..The American Civil war, which started on 12.04.1861 and ended on 09.04.1865, took place between the northern states (Union) under President Abraham Lincoln and the southern States (Confederate States), under President Jefferson Davis. Reason for this war was the slave question and the fact that the southern states had left the union after the presidential selection, which won Abraham Lincoln, who was against slavery. While the war suffering, torment, death and fear was widespread. The war ended with the victory of the Northern States, with the restoration of the state unity of the USA and with the liberation of the black slaves. So now, I ask myself the question: „How useful was the exit of the southern states from the union?“

In my opinion the exit was a really bad decision of the southern states. I came to this opinion, because the economy, the politics, the infrastructure and also the social structure of the southern states suffered enormously through the war. The southern states wanted to be independent of the northern states, because they wanted to make their decisions by themselves and were against the interference of the union in the slave question. Fact is that in the Southern States, which included South Carolina, Mississippi, Georgia, Louisiana, Florida, Alabama, Texas, Virginia, Arkansas, North Carolina and Tennessee, lived a total of 7 million inhabitants, which could be regarded as conservative. The southern states were characterized by agriculture, the cultivation and export of cotton, tobacco or even sugar plantations. Such plantations were mostly run by wealthy landowners and only gained profit because of the cheap workers, the slaves. Nearly 4 million slaves worked in these fields. But the union was against this slavery, because they didn’t have such a hardship. You have to know that there lived many more inhabitants, 20 million in total. And in addition, the immigrants landed in New York, which is why they have never had a shortage of workers and were more advanced, especially in the industry, than the southern states. So in the northern states drove industry the economy while in the southern states the economy lived by slavery and agriculture. Furthermore it was clear, that they would never be able to survive as independent state, which was another goal with their exit. They would never have enough and always would be the raw material supplier for the north or Europe. So the goal of independence was particularly pointless, because in the end America was reunited and it was absolutely futile. Moreover the civil war, caused by the exit from the Union, is the reason for high financial losses and damages. The South lost almost everything. Plantations were destroyed, but even whole cities were devastated. All in all cost enormous costs. The cost was over $ 8 billion. In add

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In addition
to this, you can say that the Southern states exit the union just because oft
he slave question, because they would make a great loss otherwise, but at the
end of the war,  at

18.12.1865,
slavery was forbidden, which is why you could say that the exit and strictly
speaking even the complete war was unnecessary.

Ultimately
the exit of the southern states from the union is fault for the war, because of
the slavery question and everything else I have wrote until here. Because of
this war, which was the bloodiest war in the history of America, over 600.000
people died and untold numbers of widows and children
had to fend for themselves, because the man died.

With the
background that so many people died and ultimately everything happened, which
is why the Southern States had actually only gone, I come to the conclusion
that the Southern extinction did not make sense and caused much more problems
than the end of slavery. I cant understand why they have incurred so much
greater loss.

Maybe because
I have no idea about the economy or their knowledge, but as an outsider it
makes me angry that they were willing to sacrifice so many people just to
sacrifice even more people in their economy because slavery is something that
should not give, in my opinion.

You cant
blame anyone, but from the point of view that Lincoln rejected slavery but
before the civil war was ready to keep it up so that the country no further
split, let the exit from the union seems like useless again.

Perhaps the
northern states should not have made too much political pressure, but exist the
union without knowing how to survive as an independent state is wrong and absolutely
selfish and naive, as well.

Naive, maybe it sounds naive as well when I say, that the exit from the union
was useless, but at looking what I have wrote until here, it seems like
useless.

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