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Wearing your own clothes or school uniforms? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

A lot of schools require students to wear a school uniform, while others allow to them to wear whatever they want. But does wearing school uniforms really make sense?

On the one hand, wearing school uniforms helps to reduce the number of students that are being bullied because of their cheap clothing. Everyone will wear the same clothes if the school has a school uniform policy. For example, students will not be able to bully the other students because of their clothing, since they’re wearing the exact same clothes.

School uniforms also help to reduce the number of gangs. Gang members often display their gang membership by wearing unique clothes with unique colors. Gang members will not be able to display their membership because they’re now wearing the same clothes. For example, this could make students feel more safe, since the gang members won’t be able to identify themselves as being part of a gang.

On the other hand, school uniforms can be quite expensive. For example, students will now have to pay for both the school uniforms and their normal clothes. This could become an issue for students whose parents are poor.

However, school uniforms restrict a student’s freedom of choice. Students will not be able to wear their own clothing. For example, a student might prefer their own clothing since it’s more comfortable. A school uniform policy could also make students who wear a uniform uncomfortable around people who do not have to wear a uniform.

I personally would not like wearing school uniforms. They would probably be too uncomfortable.

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Ist ganz gut geworden, bloß bei dem Einleitungssatz hast du ein "to" zu viel benutzt. Also einfach "while others allow them to wear whatever they want."

Und bei dem ersten Argument würde ich ein anderes Beispiel wählen, weil du das mit dem Mobbing sonst zwei Mal benutzt was bisschen überflüssig wäre. Aber sonst echt eine gute Argumentation ;)

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Also ich mache das immer so, dass ich den Text zuerst einmal durchlese auch wenn nicht viel hängen bleibt am Anfang, dann guck ich mir die Aufgaben dazu an, beantworte eventuell schon einige wenn ich die Antwort noch weiß und dann lese ich aspektorientiert, also nach der Aufgabe gerichtet. So klappt es immer bei mir ;)

Und keine Sorge packst das schon :D

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