Summary "Caribbean London" feedback
Ich bitte um Feedback meiner zusammenfassung des Green line Transition 6 Textes "Caribbean London". Danke im vorraus :) hier meine Zusammenfassung :
The Text "Caribbean London" by Green line is about the Integration and influence of caribbeans in london. (das jetzige) london is a lot by them, (like in arts or food for exemple ) they have contributed greatly to the prosperity of Britain today. When they first arrived in london in the late 1940's for helping rebuild the postwar nation Great-Britain, they encounters many difficulties. For low wages, caribbeans had to do inferior jobs, that no one else wanted to do. They also had to pay exaggerate high rents for bad housing conditions and many of them experienced racial abuse. The answer to that was the development of self-help organizations for caribbeans and the launch of "The Voice", one of the first newspapers, aimed at a black audience in Britain. But times changed, nowadays, the most of them are well-established in London. Many caribbeans had become business people running their own shops, and some of them also achieved high positions in big business and public life. They provide as well role models for future. So their situation has changed a lot .
So ich bin mir sicher, dass ich leider ein paar Sätze einfach vom deutschen ins englische übersetzt habe :/ naja ich würde gerne Tips von euch bekommen was ich besser machen könnte, was total falsch war, und so weiter ;) Den "echten " Text findet ihr im Anhang als Bild. Hab ihn nur als Bild gefunden, hoffe man kann ihn lesen... Danke :)
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The text "Caribbean London" by Green Line tells about the integration and the influence of Caribbeans in London. The actual London owes them a lot (such as arts or food). They did a great contribution regarding the prosperity of today’s Britain. When they first arrived in London in the late 1940s in order to offer their aid to the postwar nation, they encountered many difficulties. Despite being underpaid, the Carribean were forced to do inferior jobs which nobody else wanted to do. They had also to pay for their exaggeratedly high rents, although they lived in bad house conditions and many of them experienced racial abuse. The answer to this is the foundation of self-help organizations and the launch of “The Voice”, one of the first newspapers, aimed at the black audience in Britain. Now that times have changed, most of them are well-established in London. Many Carribeans have become businessmen running their own shops and some of them also attained high positions in big business and public life, they even provide role models for the future. As a result, their situation has entirely changed.
Hi erstmal
Du kannst eigentlich deinen Text direkt nochmal neu machen.
1.hast du irgendwelche Sätze wiedergeben und nicht in deinen Eigenwerte zusammen gefasst
2.hast du keine Einleitung , versuch es mal mit TATTE (und wen du nicht weißt was das ist , dann Google es)
3.schreib im simple present
- Du hast das Fazit vergessen
