Summary + Characterisation, korrektur, dringend?
Summery's: The shortstory ‚Patricia’ written by Fraser Sutherland deals with two friends, where the boy has a crush on the girl, but never told it, until a spring dance in their school comes. He forces himself to ask her, to go with her to the dance and does it, but she declines his question and at the end, both go not to the dance and go different ways too.
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The shortstory ‘Patricia’ written by Fraser Sutherland deals with two friends, where the boy has a crush on the girl, but never told it. In their school there goes a spring dance and the boy forces himself to ask her, to go with her to the dance, does it, but she just diclines his question and at the end, both of them, go not to the dance and go different ways too
was wirkt besser und richtiger, zumindest einigermaßen?
Characterisation The following text is a characterisation of the boy, one of the two main characters in the story ‘Patricia’.
The boy is a student around 16 or 17 years, how it could be assumed, because he is close to his final exams (l. 55) and his voice breaks and so ‘He [is] changing’(fg.l. 19). Furthermore the character seems to be very sporty and active, just look at the scene, where he stands in front of the mirror and ‘[looks] at himself’ and his muscles (fg.l.5) - what means, that he must be ambious too, because he worked hard, to get them. The boy could be characterized as really attentive, how the behavior shows it, related to Patricia (fg. l.7-19). ‘He [spend] an hour talking with her’ and ‘[think] a lot about asking her to go [with him]’, but he have not the guts to say directly, that he wants to go with her to the spring dance, what makes him not self-confident.
To sum it up, the boy is ambious as related to Particia, but calm, without selfconfidence, but (Mir fällt nicht ein, wie es genau zusammenfassen könnte :x)
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Summery's: The shortstory "Patricia" written by Fraser Sutherland is about two friends, a boy and a girl. The boy has a crush on the girl, but never told her, until a spring dance in their school takes place. He forces himself to ask her whether she would like to go with him to the dance and does it, but she declines his question and at the end, both do not go to the dance. Instead they go different ways.
The boy is a student. It could be assumed that he is around 16 or 17 years old. This is due to the fact that he is close to his final exams (l. 55) and his voice breaks and so ‘He [is] changing’(fg.l. 19). Furthermore, the character seems to be very sporty and active, take for example the scene, in which he stands in front of the mirror and ‘[looks] at himself’ and his muscles (fg.l.5) - which means, that he must also be ambitious, because he worked hard, to get them. The boy could be characterized as really attentive, which is shown by his behavior related to Patricia (fg. l.7-19). ‘He [spend] an hour talking with her’ and ‘[think] a lot about asking her to go [with him]’, but he does not have the guts to say directly that he wants to go with her to the spring dance, which makes him not self-confident.
To sum it up, the boy is ambious as related to Particia, but calm, without self confidence, but