Englisch Charakerisierung
Hallo Leute! Da bald meine Englischklausur ansteht wollte ich euch bitten über meine Charakterisierung rüberzuschauen und mich zu verbessern, da ich noch sehr unsicher bin. Ich hatte die Aufgabe den Erzähler in "The Big Race" zu charakerisieren.
The short story "The Big Race" by Toby Sweet is about a swimmer who tooks pity on his opponent and lets him win. This characterisation is about the narrator of the story. This boy is a fast swimmer and has to swim two length backstroke at Chester-le-Street, at that day. One of his opponents is Gordon Hayes. Before the race the narrator notices Gordon talking with his father. Out of curiosity he askes Gordon what the matter is. He gets the answer that Gordons father will his his son, if he doesn't win the race. After that, while he is warmin up and planing his strategy the narrator always has think about that. He is worried and can't concentrate. During the race the boy descides to let Gordon win, because he wants to prevent him from his father and feels sorry about that. At first, the boy regets his second place and doubts about his descision. But then he is pleased to see that Gordons father is smiling and knows it has been worth it.
Das war's. Wie kann ich den am besten auf den Charakter eingehen und weniger vom Inhalt erzählen? Ich glaube das ähnelt eher einer summary. Danke im vorraus:-)
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Mein Gott, deine Rechtschreibung ist haarsträubend. Nur bei he she it kommt im Präsens ein s an das Verb. In der Past tense kommt kein s an das Verb. Irregular Verbs scheinst du wohl auch nicht zu kennen. z. B. tooks gibt es nicht, entweder took oder takes. planning mit doppelt n, reget gibt es nicht, regrets heißt es. Also da sind so viele Fehler drin, das sprengt hier den Rahmen.
Da ich die Story nicht kenne, kann ich nichts zum Charakter der Person sagen. Aber du hast deinen Fehler ja schon selber erkannt, denn du hast im Prinzip eine Zusammenfassung der Geschichte gegeben. Versetz dich mal in die Lage des Protagonisten und überlege, was er denken und fühlen könnte. Ist er ein Siegertyp, der über Leichen geht, ist er schüchtern etc.
Aber nochmal zum Text und zur Anwendung der Tempi: Da sehe ich keine Schusseligkeit, da sind gravierende Nichtwisser-Fehler. Mit so vielen Fehlern nützt dir der allerbeste Text nichts. Dafür würde ich dir eine 5 geben, wenn du mein Schüler wärst.
Um dir wirklich gute Tips geben zu können müsste man selbst den Inhalt der Story kennen. Von Schusselfehlern kann man bei dem Englisch nicht sprechen. Satzbau und haufenweise Vokabeln sind falsch angewand von der Grammatik ganz zu schweigen... Sorry, aber das ist die Wahrheit.
In dem Du den Charakter besser analysierst und Dir immer die Frage stellst, weshalb er so handelte. Also gleich von der Gestalt erzählen und nicht aus dem Inhalt. Du musst auch nicht schreiben, dass es sich um eine Charakterisierung handelt, sondern eben eine schreiben :D
Schreib also was die Motivation des Erzählers war.
Mit dem Englisch bin ich auch nicht so glücklich... das geht sicherlich noch wesendlich besser ;o)
Hallo,
du hast ein Summary mit vielen Fehlern geschrieben.
Aus den unendlichen Weiten des Internets:
How to write a characterization
A characterization is a description of all the features that make up a personality and its development. One can distinguish between two main methods:
• direct (explicit) characterization: the reader is told about a character’s personality directly by the author, by another character or by the character him/herself
• indirect (implicit) characterization: the reader is expected to draw conclusions about a character by studying his/her behaviour, opinions, choice of words and/or way of talking
Before you start working on your characterization find out how the character’s personality is revealed in the text. Possibilities:
• through the narrator’s description of his/her outward appearance
• through direct comments on his/her character
• by what he/she does, says or thinks
• by showing what other people think or say about him/her
Then collect the facts from the text and draw your conclusions about the person’s character! Look for…
• name, age, figure, clothes, height, sex
• language, nationality, general impression
• social background, family, kind of friends, profession
• what he/she does and says
• his/her behaviour (e.g. toward other characters) and actions
• thoughts, dreams, emotions, attitudes
• what other people say/think about him/her
Move from the outward features to the inward features/nature when writing your characterization. Do not forget to work with the text by using text reference and give examples for your findings, especially when you are working on the last four categories mentioned above.
Basically present tense is used in characterizations.
:-) AstridDerPu
Nur kurz zur Rechtschreibung (hab nicht mehr Zeit): - who feels/has pity for; takes (Präsens) oder took (past) - characterization mit z - on that day - asks - Gordon's father - will his his son - soll was heißen? - warming - planning - has thought about oder has been thinking - regrets - decision
Sonst siehe Vanyce
Habe den Text ein wenig überarbeitet. Wie ist er jetzt? Ich hoffe besser!
The short story "The Big Race" by Toby Sweet is about a swimmer who feels pity for his opponent and lets him win. This characterization is about the narrator of the story. This boy is a fast swimmer and has to swim two lengths backstroke at Chester-le-Street, on that day. One of his opponents is Gordon Hayes. Before the race, the narrator notices Gordon talking with his father. He is very sceptical and feels that something wrong is going on. Out of curiosity he asks Gordon what the matter is. He gets the answer that Gordon's father will hit his son, if he doesn't win the race. After that, while he is warming up and planning his strategy, the narrator always has to think about that. He is worried and can't concentrate. During the race the boy decides to let Gordon win, because he wants to protect him from his father and feels sorry about that. His behavior is very generous, because he doesn't think about himself in this situation. Probably the shoutig of Mr. Hayes motivates him to do that. Also Gordon has been only a half of a body behind him. Maybe the narrator has thought that Gordon can manage it. At first the boy regrets that he only has come in second. He has doubts about his decision. Maybe the second place isn't enough for him. But he isn't the typical natural winner, because he doesn't have a problem to lose under the existing conditions. He is pleased to see that Gordons father is smiling and knows it has been worth it. He is sure that his decision is right!
Danke, das waren wohl einige schusseligkeits Fehler! Meine Frage hat sich jedoch auch auf den Aufbau und Inhalt einer Charakterisierung bezogen. Da noch ein paar Tipps?