Kalifornien-Präsentation nicht lang genug.
Hallo. Ich habe eine Präsentation auf Englisch, über Kalifornien geschrieben. Seht ihr Fehler? Habt ihr noch Ideen? Sie soll 5 Minuten lang werden.
California
Hello! Today I have a small Presentation for you, about California. California also knowed as the golden State, because of the Gold Rush 1848 Is the third biggest state of the USA with 31 Millions inhabitans. He lies at the Pacific and on the border to Mexico. The Flag of California shows a red stripe, a grizzly Bear and a Star. The Bear represents the strenght of CA and the Star represents a nod to Texas. California is a land of contrast. The highest Mountain ( Mount Whitney 4, 418 metres) is only some Miles away from the lowest point on the Western hemisphere in Death Valley, (86 metres below sea level.) The highest mountain of the USA the Mt. Whitney, lies in California. Not far away from Mt. Whitney there are some salty lakes, for example the Mono lake. Nearly 25 percent of the surface of California are covered with desert. In one of the National Attractions for the tourists are beside the film town: Disneyland, San Francisco, the national parks and the endlessly long beaches. In one of the National Parks - the Sequoia Park grows one of the State Symbols: The highest tree , 86 metres tall.
The climate in California is ideal for the cultivation of grapes, oranges, lemons and avocado, cotton, barley, wheat, maize, rice, oat, and sugar beets but there is a little Problem because of the overexploitation the Water disapeers. However, there is also another side of the desert: Great landscapes of salt levels, sand dunes and mountains. To that comes the silence, the lonelyness and the endless distance which makes the desert so fascinating. In 1906 the first earthquake happend in San Fransisco. Most of the City was destroyed. The last big earthquake was in 1989 and its just a question of time that another one could happend. Therefore, alot of scientists are working on improved methods of detecting earthquakes early enough to evacuate the affected area.
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Hello! Today I have a small
Presentation for you kein Komma about California. California Komma also knowed as the golden State kein Komma because of the Gold Rush Hier fehlt eine Präposition 1848 Komma
Is the third biggest state of the USA with 31 Millions inhabitans.
He lies at the Pacific and on the border to Mexico. The Flag of California shows a red stripe, a grizzly Bear and a Star. The Bear represents the strenght of CA and the Star represents a nod? to Texas. California is a land of contrast.
The highest Mountain ( Mount Whitney 4, 418 metres) is only some Miles away from the lowest point on the Western hemisphere in Death Valley, (86 metres below sea level.) The highest mountain of the USA Komma the Mt. Whitney, lies in California. Not far away from Mt. Whitney there are some salty lakes, for example the Mono lake. Nearly 25 percent of the surface of California are covered with desert. In one of the National Attractions for the tourists are beside the film town: Disneyland, San Francisco, the national parks and the endlessly long beaches. - kein vollständiger Satz; Sinn?
In one of the National Parks - the Sequoia Park -
Hier fehlt ein Wort. grows one of the State Symbols, the highest tree , 86 metres tall.
The climate in California is ideal for the cultivation of grapes, oranges, lemons and avocado, cotton, barley, wheat, maize (= BE, AE = corn), rice, oat, and sugar beets but there is a little Problem because of (---) overexploitation the Water disapeers. However, there is also another side of the desert: Great landscapes of salt levels, sand dunes and mountains.
To that comes the silence, the lonelyness and the endless distance which makes the desert so fascinating. In 1906 Komma the first earthquake happend in San Fransisco. Most of the City was destroyed. The last big earthquake was in 1989 and its just a question of time that another one could happend. Therefore, alot of scientists are working on improved methods of detecting earthquakes early enough to evacuate the affected area.
Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,
für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.
AstridDerPu
He lies at the Pacific and on the border to Mexico.
-> müsste es nicht IT lies heißen? :)
Asrrid hat Dich mittels Fettdruck schon auf Deine vielen Fehler hingewiesen. Dies möchte ich nur mit ein paar Tipps ergänzen:
know - knew - known
Eigennamen wie Golden State großschreiben
31 million inhabitants. Kalifornien hat übrigens 37 Mio Einwohner.
Nicht - Eigennamen schreibt man klein, z.B. auch "flag", "mountain", "miles", "problem"
Die letzten drei Buchstaben in "str..." = Stärke solltest Du Dir noch einmal anschauen
Berge haben KEIN "the" vor ihrem Namen
Deine Sätze mit "In one of.." ergeben überhaupt keinen Sinn. (2 verschiedene Satzstrukturen zusammengeschmissen?)
oats mit -s.
"To that comes..." ist Deutschlich-Kwänglisch, kein Englisch.
Im deinem Wort "happend" fehlt ein e
its ist nicht dasselbe wie it's.
Nach "could" kann keine Vergangenheitsform stehen.
Du kannst ja deine presentation so anfangen "Hello class xy i will present you today something about california" und am ende deiner presentation "that was my presentation and thanl you for your attention" und du kannst ja noch stars erwähnen die dort geboren sind sowas ist auch meistens interessant wenn es welche sind die eigentlich fast jeder kennt
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