Englisch text schreiben (Schwierigkeiten)?
Hallo, da ich bis morgen einen Text abgeben muss und keine Ahnung habe ob das richtig ist, wollte ich Ma fragen ob mich jemand verbessern könnte oder meinen Text besser umschreiben könnte
danke!!
The Giver, who everyone respects is the honorable elder which seems seperate from the others at the Ceremony. He is one of the most important citizen in the Community. His important, exhausting and painful job to transmit Jonas all the memories of the past is the reason why the Giver looks older than he is, his job ages him. Ten years ago the Giver taught her own daughter Rosemary, which he loves. Rosemary wanted to be released because of the painful memories. The Giver is very patiently, lonely and spends his whole life in a room, which is called the Annex Room. In the Annex Room, the Giver is training Jonas to receive the memories of the past, which the Giver has within him. The Giver does things like taking a walk, eating at mealtime, and advising The Elders of the Committee, when he is called by them. unfortunately the Giver was living with the fact that he could never change the rules of the community, but suddenly The Giver realizes because of Jonas complaints, that something needs to be changed and that it would be much better if everyone could receive the memories like Jonas and Giver. Towards the end they both made a plan to change the rules of the Community.
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Hallo, ich habe einige Fehler korrigiert- da ich die Geschichte nicht kenne, hoffe ich , dass der Inhalt stimmt. Ansonsten ist es ok
The Giver, respected by everyone, is the honorable elder who seems to be seperated from the others at the ceremony. He is one of the most important citizens in the community. His important, exhaustingc and painful job is to transmit all the memories of the past of Jonas. This is the reason why the Giver looks much older than he really is, his job exhausts him terribly. Ten years ago the Giver taught hiis own daughter Rosemary, whom he loves. Rosemary wanted to be released because of herpainful memories. The Giver is very patient, lonely and spends his whole life in a room, which is called the Annex Room. In the Annex Room the Giver trains now Jonas to receive the memories of the past, which the Giver has within him. The Giver does normal things like taking a walk, eating lunch and dinner and he advises The Elders of the Committee, when he is called by them. Unfortunately the Giver wasand is living with the fact that he will never change the rules of the community. Suddenly The Giver realizes, because of Jonas` complaints, that something needs to be changed and that it would be much better if everyone could receive the memories like Jonas and himself. Towards the end they both made a plan to change the rules of the Community.
