Englisch Argumentative essay- homeschooling Verbesserung?
Hallo zusammen,
ich schreibe morgen eine Englisch Klassenarbeit über das Thema Argumentative Essay(9.te Klasse Gymnasium). Ich habe als eine Übung ein two-sided-comment über Homeschooling geschrieben. Vorweg schonmal, Ich bin nicht sehr gut in Englisch und ich weiß, dass dies kein guter Text ist. Ich würde mich über ein schnelles Feedback und möglicherweise über eine Grammatikalische oder auch Inhaltliche Verbesserung freuen.
Danke schonmal im Vorraus!
Last week a friend from Austria visited me and told me he is learning from home. So i asked myself , if homeschooling is better than presence school.
First, I will talk about the disadvantages and later about the advantages of homeschooling. To conclude I will summarize my arguments and share my personal opinion.
My first, strongest con Argument is about the contact with the other class mates you do not have, If you learn from home. Making social contact and finding friends is really important in the early development. Interchange about clothes, hair styles, hobbys, food, movies and so one is part of it. In addition most of the time you do homeschooling alone so you can feel lonely. To sum up, the social contact should be never neglected.
My second contra Argument is about the expensivity from homeschooling. Homeschooning can be really expensive because you have a private teacher who only teaches you. Private teachers have to create a learning plan, often personalized exercises and do conferences with you which are some factors for the expensivity. All in all the expensivity is a factor which speek against homeschooling.
Nevertheless, there are some important pro Arguments for home schooling.
My strongest pro Argument is the own learning speed. In presence school you are with many other studenst in the same class and the teacher follows the average speed, which can be really frustating, when the Teacher keeps going but you do not understand the topic. In homeschooling you have the advantage that the teacher goes with your own learning speed and can always explain specificaly for you. To sum up, If you have a fast or slow learning speed, homeschooling could be the solution for you.
My second pro Argument is that in home schooling can be no bullying. You are alone with your teacher and not with other students who can bully you. Safety is really important so you can fully focus on education without beeing scared. To sum up, this is a really important aspect because bullying is bad and need to be stopped.
To conclude the con points were that you have no contact with other students and homeschooling can be really expensive because the teacher only teaches you. My pro arguments were that you can learn with your own learning speed and finish topics when you finally understood them. My pro Argument was that in home schooling there is no bullying and bullying is bad and need to be stopped. I think that homeschooling should be individual allowed, for example for people with slow or fast learning speed.
1 Antwort
Last week, a friend from Austria visited me and told me he currently is being homeschooled, which he really likes. When talking about this topic, I asked myself: is homeschooling any better than normal school?
First of all, you do not have any real physical contact with your classmates when learning from home. Having social interactions with your friends is very important in the development of children. Interchange about clothes, hobbies, food, movies, and other important topics is of high importance. In addition, you can start feeling lonely when sitting in front of a computer screen and only seeing your friends online. Social contacts should never be thoroughly neglected.
Furthermore, homeschooling can be rather expensive. Paying a private teacher for creating a lesson plan, personalized exercises and their time is nothing to be underestimated.
Nevertheless, there also quite a few positive points about homeschooling. Students can learn and study at their own pace, which is not possible in a normal public school. There, every student has to adjust to their classmates and this can be quite frustrating for both, students and teachers. A private teacher only has to focus on one student and therefore can adjust everything to their needs.
In addition, if there are no classmates, there can also be no bullying. In public schools, bullying is not uncommon. This can be mentally very exhausting, so feeling safe while learning is very important to fully focus on education.
To sum it all up, there are many positive but also as many negative points about homeschooling. If homeschooling is the right way of learning, entirely depends on the needs of the student specifically. Especially for shy students who have trouble learning in a cramped classroom, homeschooling can be a very good opportunity, while for extroverted students meeting their friends in a public school can be an important part of their day too. In the end, everyone has to decide for themselves which form of teaching is best for them.
Was du unbedingt beachten musst, ist der Aufbau eines essays. Es kommt nicht nach jedem einzelnen Pro oder Contra Argument eine summary! Die kommt wirklich erst zum Schluss. Außerdem solltest du deine Einleitung, wenn möglich, ein wenig spannender schreiben und die einzelnen Argumente mehr ausbauen.
