Come in Shila Inhaltsangabe in Englisch so ok?
Hey Ihr lieben....
The story "Come in, Sheila" is about an australian girl who listens to the radio where she has heard some information about a sheep killing dingo and that the first person who is able to find the dingo and the hole in the fence, that should protect sheeps from dingos, will earn 10$
Sheila instantly leaves her house, jumps in the jeep and tries to find what's wanted to earn the bounty. After a few minutes of driving around in her car she starts worrying about whether the old jeep was the right choice to drive through the desert. After noticing that one of the tyres run flat she realizes that it wasnt. Luckily her car ends up where the hole in the fence and the dingo family is but just in the next moment she hears a loud shot and one of the dingos hit the ground. Sheila stands up because the noice scared her and the next shot hit her and she goes down again. After a long time a rescue plane, which was called by Sheilas worried mom, lands near Sheila who waves her hand and the noice frightens away one of the dingos who just began sneaking towards Sheila.
Ist die Inhaltsangabe so ok oder sollte ich was verbessern?? Bitte Vorschläge!! Dankeee :))
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Teil 3: one of the tyres HAS run flat - realizes that it was not - AT that moment - one of the dingOES (mit -oes) - HITS the ground - .. because the noiSE - the next shot HITS her - by Sheila's (mit Apostroph) worried MOTHER (mum heißt ja "Mama") - noiSe - dingOES - Die Inhaltsangabe is aber insgesamt OK!
Danleschööön, ist zwar ein bissien später aber ich war gestern kaum zu Hause!!
Teil 2: ....jumps INTO the Jeep - ... what HAS TO BE DONE to win the REWARD.
Zum ersten Absatz: Australian (groß schreiben) - a sheep-killing dingo (mit Bindestrich, sonst würde es heißen, dass das Schaf den Dingo tötet!) - the fence (KEIN KOMMA!) that IS SUPPOSED TO (nicht: should!)protect sheep (nicht "sheeps") from dingos will earn $ 10 (Dollarzeichen VOR Zahl). - Später mehr.
Sieht sehr gut aus, und die anderen haben ja schon einiges angemerkt. Ich hätte noch:
wasn`t
the next shot hits her
frightens off (oder scares off)
(sagt zumindest leo.)
The story "Come in, Sheila" is about an Australian girl who listens to the radio where she (...)hears some information about a sheep-killing dingo and that the first person who (...)finds the dingo and the hole in the fence that is supposed to protect sheep* from dingos, will earn $10
Sheila instantly leaves her house, jumps into the jeep and tries to do what has to be done to earn the bounty. After a few minutes of driving around in her car she starts worrying (...) whether the old jeep has been the right choice to drive through the desert. After noticing that one of the tyres has run flat she realizes that it hasn't. Luckily her car breaks down where there is a (...) hole in the fence. She sees a female dingo with its pups (...) (...) At that moment she hears a loud shot and one of the dingoes hits the ground. Sheila stands up because the noise has scared her and the next shot hits her and she falls down again. After a long time a rescue plane, which has been called by Sheila's worried mother, lands near Sheila who waves her hand and the noise frightens away one of the dingoes which has just begun sneaking towards Sheila.
Ich habe ddie Korrekturen von BSWSS mit eingearbeitet:
Korrekturzeichen: fett = korrigiert bzw eingefügt, (...) = gestrichen.
Beachte: summary immer nur im Präsens - present perfect ersetzt dann das past tense. Du hast keinen einleitenden "Regenschirmsatz" geschrieben: z.B. "die Geschichte XY, abgedruckt in AB von CD handelt von einem australischen Mädchen, das sich auf eigene Faust auf eine Dingojagd begibt und dabei nur durch Glück überlebt."
Ich habe die Geschichte vor Jahren mal in einem Schulbuch 9.Klasse gelesen; wenn ich mich recht erinnere, hast du Wesentliches vergessen: 1. Sie darf nicht an der Dingojagd, die ihr Vater mit seinen farmhands macht, teilnehmen, 2. sie fährt trotz Verbotes los; 3. der Titel weist darauf hin, dass die Lehrerin ("school on air"?) sie auffordert sich zu melden, und dann den Notruf auslöst. 4. Es waren Dingo-Jäger, die sie irrtümlich anschossen.
kujapper
Ein Dank an ALLE, die hier geholfen haben, wäre doch wohl zu erwarten, meisnt Du nicht auch?