Korrektur Comment?

hey, kann jemand gut Englisch und würde mir den Teil meines Comments bitte korrigieren und gerne auch verbessern. Ich schreibe in zwei Tagen meine Klasur in Englisch, deswegen wäre es toll, wenn es jemand, der gut englisch kann, für mich korrigieren würde.

Many people think that the globalization destroys the world. In my opinion, i would disagree with this, because I think that the globalization has positive and negatives aspects / influences, which I would like to include in my Arguments. In the following i'm going to talk/ write about my cons and pros Arguments.

Firstly the globalization is bad for there environment, because it is affects the climate change in a negative way. Another contra argument of globalization are defined by the economic despondencies. For this reason, many countries can not longer supply themselves. German, for example, can only produce a very small proportion of consumers goods independently. Moreover Germany depends on the production of consumer goods for basic needs. However should there come war, strikes, or even environment disasters in these important countries, it can happen that the basic needs of Germany are no longer covered. Should the necessary supplies in the export industry accutually fail to materialize, the economy could also collapse. From this point of view, it can be doubted that this pronounced dependence on imports will have any peacemaking effects. Furthermore the Globalization, also has negative impact of the environment. With so- called environment dumping, the global wooing for investors and capital is emerging, with environmental protection being clearly neglected. Factory relocation is not always due to lower wages in other countries. The strict environmental regulations also mean that many factory locations have to be relocated to China. For this reason, globalization is not only considered a factor in worldwide wage dumping, because environmental protection is also considered a disruptive cost factor i global location competition. The worldwide dumping competition is also reflected in the energy supply. So it's happens that the demand for cheap nuclear power id constantly increasing, which is why the production of nuclear power is being expanded, despited the risks. Moreover my     next contra argument of globalization is the loss of identities. This is contributed by the globally operating companies, which ensure a uniform appearance with the branches, stored and subsidiaries that always look the same, people are not only presented with a desirable lifestyle, but also a kind of compulsion to brand awareness is promoted. However, since tge aspired consumption can nie be exercised in a personalized way, it inevitably leads to a loss of identity.

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Das ist ganz schön viel Text, und deine Fehler sind zahlreich. Grundsätzlich:

• I - ich - immer groß schreiben
• arguments etc.: Groß geschrieben werden nur Satzanfänge und Namen
• negatives, cons: Adjektive werden nicht dekliniert
• Prüfe alle Verbausdrücke, ob Singular bzw. Plural bei Subjekt(en) und Verb übereinstimmen