Englisch?
Könnte jemand eventuell bitte über meinen Text über Deutschland drüber schauen? Danke!
,,Germany is the most populated country in Europe. The population is about 84 million and it is in Central Europe. The capital of Germany is Berlin. Germany is a popular and interesting country because of its history. The second world war was begun by Germany by fighting with Poland. Adolf Hitler was like a president and he thought that Germany would be the best country ever. He killed a lot of people who lived in Germany but actually were from an other country. But suddenly on 30th of April 1945, he killed himself in Berlin. On 9th of May the war was finished and Europe was called "the United States of Europe". That is the reason why Europe has become peaceful. In 1961 a wall which was called Berlin wall was built to separate East and West Germany because the East Germans weren‘t allowed to flee into West Germany. But in 1990, the wall was destroyed and Germany has become a united nation since then. As you can see, the history of Germany was very interesting. German is also known for its special "meals“ such as beer, "Bretzel“, sauerkraut, and ,,Currywurst“ which is a special type of a sausage. Germany has the advantage that people come to Germany from all over the world and they are treated well. Most people come from Turkey, Russia, Kazakhstan and Poland. There are a lot of sights in Germany since Germany consists of 16 federal states. German corner is in Koblenz and there‘s a statue of William, the first German emperor, and it is very gorgeous there. You can explore the natural location there and just relax. Another famous sight is the Cologne cathedral which is a gorgeous catholic church. In my opinion some people could be much friendlier as they sometimes stare at you or talk to you in an unfriendly way. But of course there are also very kind people."
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Hallo,
der Text ist sehr flach und oberflächlich und enthält diverse geschichtliche Fehler. Das angegebene Kriegsende ist nicht korrekt. Und seit wann gibt es die "Vereinigten Staaten von Europa"?
- Die Bevölkerung ist nicht in Mitteleuropa sondern das Land.
- plötzlich erschoss sich H*tler
- die Ostdeutschen durften nicht aus der ehemaligen DDR ausreisen. Fliehen durften sie schon, wurden aber erschossen.
- Belasse es bei Deutsches Eck.
- Zweiter Weltkrieg wird auch im Englischengroßgeschrieben, genau wie Berliner Mauer.
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