Ich würde es wie folgt schreiben:
I would like to tell you some information about the Funland conveniently located in London Trocadero which is nearby Picadilly Circus. The funland was opened in November 2007 and was also know as 'The Troc'. There are many attractions at the park for example Lazerbowle, Starcommand and Segaworld. (hier solltest du noch beschreiben was das ist!!).
The Funland was very popular to tourists but it was closed in July 2011.
Thanks for your attention. ODER Thank you for listening!
Du musst aber noch einiges nachbessern!!