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04.05.2015, 18:08

Könnte jemand kurz mein english referat durchschauen und auch sagen was ich noch schreiben kann mir fällt nichts mehr ein .... Today i want to give you a short presentation about adidas. Adidas is a German multinational corporation that designs and manufactures sports shoes, clothing and accessories. The company is based in Herzogenaurach, Bavaria, Germany. Besides sports footwear, Adidas also produces other products such as bags, shirts, watches, eyewear and other sports and clothing-related goods. Adidas is the largest sportswear manufacturer in Europe and the second biggest in the world, after Nike.

Adolf Dassler tried to make his own shoes and his brother Rudolf joined him and together they created the Gebrüder Dassler Schuhfabrik, or the Dassler Brothers Shoe Factory in July 1924.By the 1936 Summer Olympcs, Adi Dassler drove from Bavaria on one of the worlds first motorways to the Olympic village with a suitcase full of spike and persuadded U.S. sprinter Jesse Owens to use them, the first sponsorship for an African Aemerian.Owen won four gold medels, his succes cemented the good reputation of Dassler shoes. Letter from around the world landed on the brothers desks, and the trainiers of other national teams were all interested in their shoes.In 1943,during the 2nd world war, when Adi and Rudolf (and their familes) hid in a bomb shelter during an Allied attack, Adi said something about the bombers but the brother thought he was talking about him, and the distance grew The brother split up in 1947, with Rudi forming a new firm that he called Ruda, later rebranded Puma and Adi created the company Adidas In 1954 The German team won the football world championship in Bern and the football boots from the house adidas became known worldwide. The German team used Adi Dasslers football boots with which the tunnels could be exchanged what was at that time a revolution. A dolf Dassler died in 1978, by then adidas had become world market leader of sports goods. In 1987, following Adi's son, Horst death, adidas was bought out by a Frenchman.

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von Rollercoaster99

04.05.2015, 19:16

Hey Shanabes!

Mir gefällt dein Englischreferat sehr gut, da es

a) sehr informativ ist,

b) gut strukturiert ist und

c) inhaltlich (vermutlich) nur Flüchtigkeitsfehler aufweist.

Ich denke, mehr kann man in einem Kurzreferat kaum sagen. Vielleicht solltest du aber noch erwähnen, dass die Adidas AG zugleich Hersteller der Marken Adidas (logisch ^^), Reebok (Sportschuhe, Sportbekleidung, Sportaccessoires, etc.) und TaylorMade (Golfausrüstung; Platz 3 der umsatzstärksten Golfausrüster weltweit) ist. Außerdem könntest du noch sagen, in welchem Zusammenhang Rudolfs Firma "Ruda" und Adolfs Firma "Adidas" mit ihren Namen stehen (Rudolf Dassler -> Ruda; Adi Dassler -> Adidas).

-Fehlerkorrektur-

Today i want to give you a short presentation about adidas.

Today I want to give you a short presentation about Adidas.

-> besser: Today I want to tell you something about Adidas.

By the 1936 Summer Olympcs, Adi Dassler drove from Bavaria on one of the worlds first motorways to the Olympic village with a suitcase full of spike and persuadded U.S. sprinter Jesse Owens to use them, the first sponsorship for an African Aemerian.

By the 1936 Summer Olympics, Adi Dassler drove from Bavaria on one of the worlds first motorways to the Olympic village with a suitcase full of spike and persuaded U.S. sprinter Jesse Owens to use them, the first sponsorship for an African American.

-> Hier solltest du noch erwähnen, dass "Adi" der Spitzname von Adolf Dassler war!

-> Adolf Dassler, also called "Adi", drove from Bavaria...

Owen won four gold medels, his succes cemented the good reputation of Dassler shoes.

Owen won four gold medals, his success cemented the good reputation of Dassler shoes.

Letter from around the world landed on the brothers desks, and the trainiers of other national teams were all interested in their shoes.

Letters from around the world landed on the brothers' desks, and the trainers of other national teams were all interested in their shoes.

In 1943,during the 2nd world war, when Adi and Rudolf (and their familes) hid in a bomb shelter during an Allied attack, Adi said something about the bombers but the brother thought he was talking about him, and the distance grew.

In 1943, during the 2nd World War, when Adi and Rudolf (and their families) hit in a bomb shelter during an Allied attack, Adi said something about the bombers but the brother thought he was talking about him, and the distance grew.

-> besser: In 1943, during the 2nd World War, when Adi and Rudolf (and their families) were hit by a bomb shelter during an Allied attack, Adi said: "The bastards are back again" referring to the Allied war planes, but Rudolf was utterly convinced that his brother had been referring to him and his family and the distance between them grew.

The brother split up in 1947, with Rudi forming a new firm that he called Ruda, later rebranded Puma and Adi created the company Adidas.

The brothers split up in 1947, with Rudi forming a new firm that he called Ruda, later rebranded Puma and Adi created the company Adidas.

-> Wie sind die Namen entstanden? Noch einfügen!

In 1954 The German team won the football world championship in Bern and the football boots from the house adidas became known worldwide.

In 1954, the German team won the football world championship in Bern and the football boots from (the house) Adidas became known worldwide.

-> besser: In 1954, the German team won the football world championship in Bern and the football boots from (the house) Adidas became famous worldwide.

A dolf Dassler died in 1978, by then adidas had become world market leader of sports goods. In 1987, following Adi's son, Horst death, adidas was bought out by a Frenchman.

Adolf Dassler died in 1978, by then Adidas had become (the) world market leader of sports goods.

-> besser: In 1987, after the death of Adi's son Horst, Adidas was bought (out) by a Frenchman.

So, ich hoffe, dass das alles war :)

Es sieht mir aber eher danach aus, dass es sich hierbei (meistens) um Flüchtigkeitsfehler handelt.

Ich wünsche dir viel Erfolg bei deinem Referat und hoffe, dass ich dir helfen konnte :)

LG Rollercoaster99

PS: Wenn du den Text schon von Wikipedia kopierst, dann beim nächsten Mal bitte ohne Fehler! Danke :)

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