Würde mir jemand helfen meinen englischen Satz auf Fehler zu überprüfen?

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ALLES möchte ich Dir aus prinzipiellen Gründen nicht übersetzen, weil GF kein Gratis-Übersetzungsbüro ist.

Der Anfang, frei übersetzt:

Ihr wisst es wahrscheinlich nicht, aber ich leide darunter, dass meine Haare dünner werden und dass ich auch Haare verliere. Es sieht also so aus, als wären meine Träume, wieder volles Haar zu haben, zum Stillstand gekommen. Ich vertrage nicht....

Er/Sie wollte ja auch keine Übersetzung, sondern nur wissen, ob sein/ihr Text Fehler hat.

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Trotzdem Danke für die Mühe :)

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Dein Text ist total ok, sehr gut sogar :-)

Ein paar stilistische Vorschläge hätte ich dennoch, obwohl du den Text auch ohne Veränderung lassen könntest.

You guys probably aren't aware that I have....... and it looks like my dream of once again having a full head of hair have come to a standstill.

I also don't want to take Finasteride due to possible side effects.

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*has come to a standstill (not have) Sorry! Eigentlich wäre es besser zu sagen "and it looks like I might have to give up on my dream of a full head of hair" Träume kann man in dem Sinn nicht halten /stoppen da sie kein Prozess sind. Sie sind schon da.

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Soweit ich das sehen kann, ist alles korrekt. 👍🏻😊

Bewerbung auf Englisch- könnt ihr die korrigieren, verbessern und tipps geben? :)

Application for a work place in summer 2013

Dear Mr Miller

I am writing to apply for the holiday job that was advertised in the 'Daily News' yesterday for helpers at your holiday camp in Spain thid summer.

When I leave school I would like to find a career working with children I would be available to work for you for the whole german summer holidays (xx.xx. - xx.xx.xxxx). Last year, I was employed in a summer camp in Italy and I really enjoyed it, so I have already some knowledge of the job. Also I have always helped my parents with my two younger sisters having much fun. I learnt from thid about children's behaviour and how to handle then. Having learnt English at school for seven years, I would have no language problems.

I hope very much that you are able to offet mr a holiday job. I would make myself as useful as possible. Thank you for reading this application. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely

Unterschrift (xxxxxx xxxxxxxxxx)

Encl. CV

Danke! :) Die Absätze müsst ihr euch dazu denken, bin mit handy on... Klappt dann nicht... ;(

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Englisch, Argumentation, Verbessern?

Hallo, ich schreibe morgen eine Arbeit und habe schon ein paar Argumentationen geschrieben. Heute hat meine Lehrerin einen Hinweis auf das Thema gegeben: Volunteer work. Ich habe dann einfach mal eine Argumentation dazu geschrieben. Wahrscheinlich kommt nicht nur Volunteer work dran, aber es wäre toll, wenn ich schon eine gute Grundlage habe. Ich weiß das ich bestimmt ein paar Grammatische Fehler habe.

Volunteer work is a important for the poor, disadvantaged groups or teenagers (youth centre) or generel the society, but also people don't like this kind of work, why? Is volunteer work useful? Mostly volunteer work deal with people, for example you ask for donation, like money, eat or clothes. Subsequently people don't like this question, because they think its annoying or maybe the organisation is not serious. In the past some organisations has use the money for his own and now people aren't sure, if the organisation approved or serious. Thats why you can feel depressed, because you do this at your free time and you are not paid for your work. On the one hand, people don't like your work, but on the other hand you can help the society, also when some people don't honor your work, but it gives also people, who think thats a good job and honourable. Furthermore you can feel good by your own and you can say, you help people who needs help and don't see away (nicht weg sehen?). Additionally you can gain experience for a job or the life. In a CV it looks very good. So also your character can be better, for example you know the real problems, like no food or money to live. Then you see, thats your problems are nothing in comparison with this problems. Finally in my opinion volunteer work is important and I do this also and when somebody say something bad about your work. Ignor this! There more people who like it and especially the people who need your work.

Ich würde mich auf eine Antwort freuen und ich weiß eure Mühe zu schätzen, wenn ihr es korrigiert und mir vielleicht ein paar Tipps geben könnt. Ich hoffe es antwortet noch jemand heute. Aber trotzdem danke!

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Englisch Text korriegieren

Hallo kann jemand folgenden Text korrigieren? Dankeschön Dear Ben Russell, I read your article “Credit cards to ration individuals' carbon use“, which is published in newspaper The Independent in July19,2006. First of all I want to say that I think it's very good that there are people like you who think about the environment and of course about the problems which are exist. The suggestion is that every body has a credit-card with Carbon Dioxide points and if someone travels, use electricity, gas or petrol with carbon rations they have to pay. There is a special amount of this points and if you need more than your personal cap you have to buy credits on the open market. On the other side if there are people who cut the pollution of the carbon they produce, they could sell their surplus. Mr Miliband also suggests that banning products like light bulbs or electrical appliances which waste power while on standby, have to forbid. Everyone have to make automatic payments of offset pollution. I think this credit cards are not a good idea, because there would be a discrimination, because on the one hand rich people wouldn't cut their consume because they have the money to buy this credits. The most of them wouldn't take care about the environment. On the other hand the poor people have to take care about their carbon use. They haven't got the money to buy new credits. The result would be that the poor people take care and the richer people don't take care. Now you can say that it's maybe not a completely good result but now there are a few people who take care. Better than no one. But what is if the poorer people have to use the car everyday because they have to drive to work. They have to pay that they are working. This wouldn't make work more attractive. The poorer people are disadvantaged. Another cause why this credit cards are not a good idea is that you can't control it. There would be a lot of situations where are disagreements. For example if people drive together to work. Now who have to pay with carbon for that? The driver or the other ones? Another fact is that you can't handle everything with money. Everyone has to pay that the environment become better. But money doesn't help. You can't stop the global warming with money. My idea is that there have to be recompenses for those people who do something against the environment problems. There have to be individual things, which make environment protection very attractive and also necessary. It's very important that everybody knows about the problems and the results if we go on like this. All in all I think it's very good that there are people who think about a solution and things that can be do to stop the global warming. Nevertheless I think the credit-cards and money wouldn't be a good solution

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