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The Secret Garden Marry Lenox is born in India, her hair is yellow, her face is yellow, she has a little thin face, and a little thin body. All in all she is a very disagreeable and bad-tempered girl who is most time playing by herself, because her parents don’t spend time on her. But then an illness kills all her servants and her parents. She is send to England where her uncle, Archibald Craven, lives. First she meets Martha, a nice housemaid, which becomes the first real friend of Marry. She is often in conversation with her and is telling her a big secret about the mysterious house. There is a secret garden with a locked door and nobody knows where the key is. So she decides to search the key. On her way she meets Ben, a gardener, and his little robin. One day with the help of the robin she founds the buried key and the door. She is fascinated by the garden and decides to prepare it for the summer. But she can’t do it alone and so she meets Dickon, the little brother of Martha who is spending most time in the nature by the wild animals. Together they work every day in the garden and become very big friends. But one night she hears somebody crying. It isn’t the first time she hears that mystic sound, but every time she wants to look somebody stops her. In a room behind a tapestry she finds a boy, Colin Craven, her cousin. Everybody, including the doctor thinks that he will die, but with Marry’s and Dickon’s help he becomes more healthy than ever before.
I can really recommend this book for everybody who is a fan of mystic stories. First I thauht the story would become very boring, because the mystery of the secret garden is very early cleared up. But in reality after that the story becomes exciting. All in all the book is wonderfully written and is suitable for every age.
hier meine Korrekturen nach einem ersten, flüchtigen Durchlesen:
The Secret Garden
Marry Lenox is born in India, her hair and her face are yellow, she has a little thin face, and a little thin body. All in all, she is a very disagreeable and bad-tempered girl, who plays by herself most of the time (kein Komma) because her parents do not spend time on her. However, when an illness kills all her servants and her parents, she is sent to England*, where* her uncle Archibald Craven kein Komma lives. First, she meets Martha, a nice housemaid, who becomes Mary’s first real friend. She is often in conversation with her and tells her a big secret about the mysterious house. There is a secret garden with a locked door and nobody knows where the key is. So she decides to search for the key. On her way, she meets Ben, a gardener, and his little robin. One day, with the help of the robin she finds the buried key and the door. She is fascinated by the garden and decides to prepare it for the summer. But as she cannot do it alone (besser: on her own), she **sees Dickon, Martha’s little brother**, who spends most of his time with (---) wild animals in (---) nature**. Together, they work in the garden every day and become very close friends. But one night, she hears somebody crying. It is not the first time she hears this mysterious sound, but every time she wants to look somebody stops her. In a room behind a tapestry, she finds a boy, Colin Craven, her cousin. Everybody, including the doctor thinks that he will die, but with Marry’s and Dickon’s help he gets more healthy than ever before. I can really recommend this book to everybody who is a fan of mystery/mysterious stories. First, I thought the story would be very boring kein Komma because the mystery of the secret garden is solved very early in the story. But in reality the story gets exciting after that. All in all, the book is wonderfully written and (is) suitable for every age.
- In der Schriftsprache sollten keine Kurzformen (don't, isn't usw.) verwendet werden.
- Solltest du nicht am Anfang auch den Autor und das Erscheinungsdatum erwähnen?
- In eine Zusammenfassung gehört keine eigene Bewertung/Empfehlung
get + adjective = werden
I'm getting old. The weather is getting worse and worse. I'm getting bored with this.
get + Substantiv = bekommen
Wenn du zum Kellner (waiter) im Restaurant sagst; "I become a chicken.", wird er sich vor Lachen biegen, weil du kein Hühnchen bestellt hast, sondern weil du gesagt hast, "Ich werde ein Hühnchen." Du hättest sagen sollen: "I get a chicken." (Ich bekomme ein Hühnchen.)
In diesem Fall ist become für uns Deutsche ein falscher Freund (false friend) und heißt werden.
get dagegen heißt bekommen.
(Auch wenn man beim Bestellen im Restaurant richtig sagen sollte: I'll have a chicken. (spontane Entscheidung, im Moment des Sprechens) I am going to have a chicken. (persönliche Absicht, persönlicher Plan)
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Zum Inhalt mag ich nichts weiter sagen, da es schonlange her ist, dass ich das Buch gelesen habe.
Zusätzlich zu Astrids Korrekturen würde ich noch vorschlagen: Ist es wirklich "Marry" - oder "Mary"?
was born in India .... Punkt nach "India" .... **who usually plays alone ...do not spend much time with her... meets Martha, who becomes Marry's best friend ... ** Am Schluss nicht "would be" (das würde sich ja auf ZUKUNFT beziehen!): Also:
First I thought the story was/is boring
Leicht verständlich. Guter Überblick. Brauchst du das für eine Buchvorstellung? Weil du dann vielleicht schon ein bisschen zu viel verrätst... ;)
Inhaltsfehler kann ich nicht beurteilen, habe das Buch selbst nicht gelesen..