Verbesserungsvorschläge für meine Inhaltsangabe (Simple Present)

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Über den Inhalt kann ich nicht viel sagen, aber da sind eineige Rechtschreib und Grammatik fehler drin, unter anderem das dauernde ´s , nicht alle worte die im englishen auf s enden werden mit ´ geschrieben , nur bei Besitz sachen, also" Cathy's Apartment" aber nicht bei "come's" oder "live`s". Außerdem ist manchmal das falsche groß oder kleingeschrieben, "Apartment" muss klein, aber "cathy" muss groß, generell müssen nur der Satzanfang und Eigenamen groß sein. New York wird zum beispiel großgeschrieben.

Nur auf die Schnelle, weil ich gleich weg muss:

Korrigiere:

  • Klein- und Großschreibung
  • Nur das Genitiv s wird mit Apostroph abgetrennt. Das Plural s und das s in der 3. Person Einzahl (he/she/it) wird fest ans Nomen bzw. Verb angehängt. Manchmal muss auch es angehängt werden.
  • He/she/it das s muss mit; manchmal auch es.
  • vor because steht kein Komma
  • Satzstellung

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.eu,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.

Tipps und Wendungen zu englischen Summaries findest du hier:

http://www.ego4u.de/de/cram-up/writing/summary.

:-) AstridDerPu

The book escape in New York written by ... The book is about Cathy , a girl whose Stepmother deal with drug´s . Kevin want to help her , because Cathy is in big troubles.

Kevin meet Cathy at the Cofee shop and feel that Cathy is in big troubles . Her Stepmother comes into the coffee shop and pulls her arm and drive with Cathy to New York.

Kevin want to help Cathy , so he drives with a truck stop to New York , for ask his aunt Bella for help.

As he is in New York he look for Cathys Appartment and finally he find the appartment. But fast understand Kevin , that he is does´nt welcome . A black african man want´s to kill him , but Kevin can be safe him in a house . As he is in the house of his aunt Bella , Cathy calls him on his mobile and tell him evrything what happened . In Kevins job he learned Debbie , a women . Debbie wants to help him . So he makes a plan with her . Debbie drive to the appartment and deflect the security man , Kevin uses the opportunity of and runs in the appartment of Cathy . In the appartment came the african man and fight with Kevin . The african Man lose the fight . At lastly Cathy come and live wth Kevin for the rest of her life by his aunt

Eine Frage welches Buch ist das ??

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@gtf4tiuser

na "escape in new york" das steht doch gleich im ersten Satz ;-)

übrigens enthält dein Text auch viele Fehler - u.a. das S am verb bei he/she/it ...

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Kann mir jemand dieses Summary korrigieren?

The text 'A life in the day' is written by a 27 years-old man who called Skinnyman and lives in north London. It's a interview in which he describe his course of his day. First he tells that he is addicted to cannabis. He provides the dealer, who make money with the addicts. Because the addicts have'nt got money, they were get guns from dealers to get money for the drugs. His lifestyle is'nt normal, because he don't go sleep when it'snormal. It is indifferent when he sleeps and when he wakes up. Also he mentions that he gets a record deal. He loves music and mostly he writes his lyrics in the night, when he has the best ideas. Because of his record deal he has many haters in the ghetto. Most of the people are jealous because thay think that Skinnyman has money, but it isn't the truth. His life is very problematic. He has often problems with the police and other authorities. But it doesn't cares him. He thinks that only his father can tell him what to do, but he left him and his mother early. Also he explains that all his friends went to prison, so he decides to go another way. Nevertheless he have to go to prison for 2 years, but he did 12 months. The reason for that was a conflict with a memeber of London Underground staff. In conclusion he did it and now he wants to held other young kids. So all in all he loves this place, because it's his home. Therefore he doesn't want to leave.

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Kann mir wer diese englische Zusammenfassung korrigieren?

`The Absolutely True Diay of a part time Indian´ is the abridged adapted version from the novel by Sherman Alexie and is about an Indian Boy. who is going on a all-white-school In the first paragraph, Arnold is flirting with Penelope. She is telling him her dreams, but Arnold laughing at her. He is asking her, what she really want to do with her life. Then she´s telling him, her real dreams. She´s wanting to be a architect. Arnold doesn´t lauhging at her, because it´s his drem too.

In the second paragraph Arnold and Penelope are going with roger and his friends to a diner. He is ordering many things for Penelope and him. But he is sad, because he haven´t money. He is poor. As Arnold going to the toilett, he tells Roger that he has forget his wallet, but Arnold is lying. Roger is understanding and lending him the money. At the school Penelope telling him, that she´s knwoing that he has lending money from roger. She´s asking him, whether he is poor and he didn´t lying to her. Penelope telling it roger and he helping him in the future. Now Arnold knowing that he doesn´t need to lie.

Danke schonmal im vorraus,

Mylania

Ps: Die Aufgabe war ein Text zusammenzufassen und das in der Jetzt Form

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Charakterisierung Englisch Just Along for a Ride Fehle?!

Wäre lieb, wenn jmnd. drüberschauen könnte und evtl. Fehler findet, Verbesserungsvorschläge...

The story “Just Along for the Ride” by Dennis Kurumada in 1972 is about young boys who dirve in a car and try to flatten a kid. This plan gets out of control and doesn’t turn out well. The main character of the story ”Just Along for a Ride” is a male student, about 16 years old. The protagonist uses everyday language (l.15) He describes himself being “pretty dull” (l.3), because he drives around with his friend who just got his license. In fact he is “cold, damp and bored” (l. 5) what the narrator also tells us directly (the main character is also the narrator. That implies that they aren’t very creative, otherwise he wouldn’t be bored. As the other boys want to flatten a kid he doesn’t agree. On the one hand he has feelings of guilty, he’s a thoughtful person. On the other hand he is scared, which means that he is a careful person and thinks about the consequences. Because of this characteristic he is gibed by his friends. They think that he is a killjoy and not humorous. For example: “You worry too much. Whenever we wanna have some fun, you always chicken out.” (l.15). He isn’t very assertive or strong-minded in the beginning. His friends retune him and oppress him. For instance: “We drive up slow, then swing open the door real fast, and knock the guy on his can,” says Phil (l.10). The protagonist is against it. “You guys are nuts,” he says and “What if they call the cops?” (l.15) Although they still do it. Or in line 34 he wants the driver to stop the car but the driver convinces him that it is necessary to drive on. In the end he feels guilty even if it hasn’t been his idea and he tried to stop the others. That’s why he is really responsible-minded but he also doesn’t want his friends to get in trouble, he’s kind of loyal. He shows his feelings what makes him sensible (l.30). Finally he gets strong-minded and assertive. At night his friends visit him and propose him to forget about the crime. He gets mad and visits the victim, what nobody expects. All in all I think the protagonist is a adorable person. I can identify with the character because it’s realistic how he reacts. Besides I liked it a lot that he did not do what his friends want him to do. He goes his own was and that’s brave. In opposite to the protagonist there’s Phil also a co-driver. He is male, a student and about 16 years old. The first time he says something he cuts off the protagonist (l.8). That’s impolite and not respectful. On top of that he is vicious, careless and sneaky because he has the idea “to drive up to somebody….some kid….and flatten him.”(l.8) He is language is colloquial, e. g. “We wanna have some fun…“ (l.16) and firstly he doesn’t speak fluently (l.8) It seems that he tries to be funny and cool, so the others respect him. In conclusion I think Phil isn’t very authentic and very likeable. I have the impression that he is a daredevil and a false friend.

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Kann mir jemand dieses summary von "A message from the Pig-man" korrigieren?

habe eine summary zum text a message from the pig-man von john wain geschrieben, wäre nett wenn ihr eure meinung dazu äußern würdet und ggf fehler verbessern könntet oder zumindest sagen, wo sie sind :)

The story „A Message from the Pig-man“, written by John Wain, is about a 6-year old boy named Eric, which has many questions he would like to ask but is afraid to do so.

Eric is the son of newly divorced parents. He has no siblings and his mum has a new boyfriend named Donald. He has difficulty with the new circumstances and does not understand why his father had to leave just because Donald moved in. He also does‘nt mind sharing his room in order for his dad to have the spare room. He is afraid of the pig-man and avoids him. He imagines the pig-man as a man who looks like a pig. One day, his mother asks him to catch the pig-man to bring him the scarps. First he was afraid, but when he sees the pig-man he realizes that the pig-man is a normal person and finally understands that the people call him pig-man, because he has some pigs that he looks after. Eric is no longer afraid of asking questions. When he comes home, he asks his mother why his father can‘t stay with them but his mother does‘nt answer him. Now he thinks that grown-ups are very silly and he hates them all.

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