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Kommentar von Nessa1707
01.12.2013, 16:14

Ich weiß es nicht, das ist das Problem. Weil bei dem unteren also bei der story ist das ja teilweise schon passiert und teilweise Dinge aus der Vergangenheit die aber bis in die Gegenwart anhalten.

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Today I would like to talk about the sitcom Two and a half men. Firstly Komma I would Hier fehlt etwas. tell (besser: give) you the general facts of this sitcom. Is

is created (Zeit) by Chuck Lorre and Lee Aronsohn and on 22st September 2003 it was broadcoasted (= AE; BE = broadcast) on CBS for the first time. Here, in Germany, the sitcom was firstly broadcoasted (s.o.) by ProSieben and in Austria on ORF on 12th March 2005. But at the first season it had the header "Mein cooler Onkel Charlie". The series got a lot of awards, for example the „Emmy“ or the „People's Choice award“

Now I would like to tell you the story of two and a half men. The popular composer Charlie Harper lived (Zeit) on the beach in Malibu. Typical for him are alkohol, sex and whores and he has an easy life as an womanizer. Charlie's brother Alan and his wife Judith get divorced, so he moved (Zeit) to Charlie. Alan is Hier fehlt der unbestimmte Artikel. chiropractor and have an own practice. He is shy, not very popular in woman and he is searching for (ohne Artikel oder mit Personal Pronoun. ''big Love''. So he's the opposite of Charlie. Alans's son Jake stayed (Zeit)

by Charlie every weekend**, too**. He is a substandard pupil and only interested in eating and watching TV. He likes his uncle Charlie for his life and Charlie likes Jake for his easy character**, too**. Charlie and Alan's dad was died (Zeit) and they didn't know (Zeit) him. Evelyn is theire mother and Charlie often call

him a devil. Berta is the houskeeper and she is popular for her sarcastical slogans. She dismiss her job and she's a bit lazy. Charlie was engaged with Chelsea but then he went with his crazy stalkerin Rose to Paris and there, they married.

In the new season Komma Charlie was died in Paris. Alan succeeded his Villa, but he can't pay it. So he searched for an cohabiter, but one day he saw Walden, who wanted to kill himself in the ocean. Walden Schmidt is an IT-billionaire and he bought the Villa and so Alan and Walden life there together.

Mit den Zeiten geht es kunterbunt durcheinander.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.eu,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.

AstridDerPu

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Kommentar von Nessa1707
01.12.2013, 16:44

Vielen Dank. Auf Rechtschreibung und Komma's hab ich nicht geachtet, weil ich das ein Text ist, den ich vortragen muss.

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Korrekturen, nur einzelne Beispiele:

First I would like to..

was broadcast on CBS.

typical of

.. the story of "Two and a Half Men"

lives in Malibu (Er wohnt nicht auf dem Strand, ist kein Penn.er) )

...and prostitutes...

popular with women

are divorced? were / got divorced ? (hängt vom Kontext ab).

Alan is a chiropractor and has his own practice

Alan's son

Charlie and Alan's father died early (is dead)...

their mother

often calls him a "devil"

housekeeper

gives up her job? loses her job?

engaged** to**

Es gibt kein Wort "stalkerin" im Englischen

In the latest season Charlies dies in Paris ( "Was died würde heißen: "wurde gestorben").

"succeeded his villa" ergibt keinen Sinn. Inhaltsangabe im PRESENT TENSE!!!

can't pay for it , he sees... he buys... live together there.

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Kommentar von Nessa1707
01.12.2013, 17:05

Vielen Dank.

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Today I would like to talk about the sitcom Two and a half men. Firstly I will tell you the general facts about this sitcom. It was created by Chuck Lorre and Lee Aronsohn and on the 22nd September 2003 it was broadcoasted on CBS for the first time. Here, in Germany, the sitcom was firstly broadcoasted by ProSieben and in Austria on ORF on 12th March 2005. But at the beginning it had another title: "Mein cooler Onkel Charlie". The series is very popular, so it got a lot of awards, for example the „Emmy“ or the „People's Choice award“

Now I would like to tell you the story of two and a half men. The popular composer Charlie Harper lives on the beach in Malibu. Typical for him are alcohol, sex and many women. He has an easy life as an womanizer. Charlie's brother Alan and his wife Judith get divorced, so he moved to Charlie. Alan is chiropractor and has his own practice. He is shy, not very popular and he is searching for the ''big love''. So he's the opposite of Charlie. Alans's son Jake stayed by Charlie every weekend, too. He is a substandard pupil and only interested in eating and watching TV. He likes his uncle Charlie for his cool way of life and Charlie likes Jake for his easy character, too. Charlie and Alan's dad died and they didn't know him. Evelyn is their mother and Charlie often calls her a devil. Berta is the housekeeper and she is popular for her sarcastical slogans. She dismiss her job and she's a bit lazy. Charlie was engaged with Chelsea but then he went with his crazy stalker Rose to Paris and there they married.

In the new season Charlie died in Paris. Alan succeeded his Villa, but he can't pay for it. So he searched for a cohabiter, but one day he met Walden, who wanted to kill himself in the ocean. Walden Schmidt is an IT-billionaire and he bought the Villa, so Alan and Walden live there together.

Also ich habe dir ein paar Zeit-Fehler verbessert und manchmal eine andere Satzstellung, sonst gar nicht so schlecht. Manchmal ein paar passendere Wörter, aber ich bin keine Lehrerin und komme auch nicht aus England, also weiß ich auch nicht alles und ich denke, dass es so für die Schule völlig ausreichend ist. :)

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