Teleworking Englisch

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Der erste Satz ist ein run-on sentence. Da muss irgendwo noch ein Komma eingebaut werden oder in 2 Sätze umwandeln. Ausserdem macht er nicht sehr viel sinn. Würde es in etwas ändern wie "The term Teleworking means that you work at home and use modern technology to keep in touch with your business. " 

2 Satz ist ok. (nur nach convenient muss noch ein Komma hin) Evtl "Jobs" in Workplaces umändern und "places" in "areas" umändern - hört sich einfach besser an, aber wie es jetzt dort steht ist auch korrekt.

3 Satz, "on the one hand" "the" kann weg. I haven't contact with my colleagues ist völlig falsch (haven't = have not) im Deutschen würde sich das übersetzen zu "Ich nicht haben kontakt mit meinen Kollegen" ändere haven't in "I wouldn't have (as much) contact with my colleagues. " "no concentration" macht auch nicht wirklich sinn, wenn du eine liste erstellen willst (deswegen die vielen Kommas?) Würde ich schreiben: I wouldn't have (as much) contact with my colleagues, I would be less concentrated, and I would be distracted because I would be at home." So macht es viel mehr sinn, das no quiet workplace kannst du weglassen denn wir haben ja schon gesagt das du nicht so konzentriert bist, das würde sich dann einfach wiederholen und langweilig für den leser sein.

4 Satz: Hier hast du wie schon vorher "would" vergessen, denn wir sprechen ja von der Theorie, so wie du es geschrieben hast würde es bedeuten das du es jetzt schon hast, was nicht der fall ist. Also ändern wir: "I would have more time for my family, my own time-management, lower costs, I would cause less polution. " because I doesn't ist hier auch falsch benutzt, im Deutschen würde es sich so übersetzen: Weil ich tut nicht muss zu fahren mit meinem Auto. Macht nicht wirklich sinn oder? Also ändern wir es: "Because I wouldn't have to drive (my car). - "my car" kannst du auch weg lassen, denn du kannst ja nichts anderes fahren, du wiederholst dich nur. Ich würde diesen satz in klammern hinter "less polution" setzen. And I can, auch hier wieder und ich kann, wir müssen das "kann" in könnte verwandeln, also schreiben wir: and I could pamper myself if I felt ill. Also zusammen würde es jetzt so aussehen: "I would have more time for my family, my own time-management, lower costs, I would cause less polution (becaue I wouldn't have to drive), and I could pamper myself if I felt ill."

5 Satz: "to do" in "doing" ändern. Wieder: hier kannst du kein haven't verwenden! Ändere es in: "I wouldn't have contact with my colleagues," which is shame geht so auch nicht, du kannst es ändern in: "which is sad" oder "which is a shame". Dann würde ich einen zweiten Satz machen, sonst läufst du die gefahr von einem run-on sentence. Jetzt würde ich schreiben: But, in the end, my family is more important (to me) than everyone else. Das "are" muss zu "is" geändert werden (mit are würde es heissen: Meine Familie sind mir wichtiger...) Würde das "to me" noch hinzufügen, hört sich einfach besser an. Dann ganz am ende: colleagues and all other - das wiederholt sich wieder, würde also nur schreiben everyone else, weil "all other" benutzt man eher für Objekte und nicht für Menschen.

Teleworking means working from home using modern technology to keep in touch with your business. Jobs can be relocated to places where it is more attractive, more convenient or cheaper to live. On the one hand, I haven´t contact with my colleagues, no inspiration, no quiet workplace to concentrate and distraction at home (Du hast keine Abwechselung zuhause?). But on the other hand, I have more time for my family, I have my own time-management, less pollution, lower costs (kein Komma) because I doesn´t have to drive with my car, less control and I can pamper myselves if I feel ill.

I could imagine to do teleworking,

I haven´t contact with my colleagues, this is very shame Komma but my family are more important than my colleagues and all other. - Dieser Teil ergibt nicht wirklich Sinn.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.

AstridDerPu

Dankeschön :) was würdest du denn als stattdessen:I haven´t contact with my colleagues, this is very shame Komma but my familyare more important than my colleagues and all other hinschreiben?

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PS: Bis auf den letzten Satz I could imagine... würde ich nicht aus der Ich-Perspektive schreiben, sondern you (man) statt I benutzen.

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Teleworking means working from home using modern technology to keep in touch with your business. Jobs can be relocated to places where it is more attractive, more convenient or cheaper to live. On the one hand, I haven´t contact with my colleagues, no inspiration, no quiet workplace to concentrate and distraction at home. But on the other hand, I have more time for my family, I have my own time-management, less pollution, lower costs, because I doesn´t have to drive with my car, less control and I can pamper myselves if I feel ill. I could imagine to do teleworking, I haven´t contact with my colleagues, this is very shame but my family are more important than my colleagues and all other.

Analyse Society Eddie Vedder

Eng Analyse.. Habt ihr paar stylistic Devices?/Rhetorischee Mittel?

It's a mystery to me We have a greed with which we have agreed And you think you have to want more than you need Until you have it all, you won't be free

Society, you're a crazy breed I hope you're not lonely without me

When you want more than you have, you think you need And when you think more than you want, your thoughts begin to bleed I think I need to find a bigger place Cause when you have more than you think, you need more space

Society, you're a crazy breed I hope you're not lonely without me Society, crazy indeed Hope you're not lonely without me

There's those thinking more or less, less is more But if less is more, how you keepin score? Means for every point you make your level drops Kinda like you're startin' from the top And you can't do that

Society, you're a crazy breed I hope you're not lonely without me Society, crazy indeed I hope you're not lonely without me Society, have mercy on me I hope you're not angry if I disagree Society, you're crazy indeed I hope you're not lonely without me

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Englisch monolog

Hallo, nächste Woche habe ich meine mündliche Prüfung in Englisch. Mein Thema ist mein Hund und ich muss ein Monolog ca. 5 min halten (+ kurze Vorstellung). Ich habe erst seit 1 jahr Englisch, früher hatte ich kein Englisch gehabt und gelernt und jetzt ist mir sehr schwierig alles allein zu vorbereiten und deswegen auch eure Hilfe brauche. Ich habe was bisschen geschrieben, ich weiss aber nicht ob er richtig ist und ich hab echt keine Ahnung was ich mehr schreiben kann, können sie mir helfen ? Ich würde micht, über eure Antworten freuen. So das hab ich bis jetzt: Good morning, my name is .... and I am ... years old. I come from ... and I live in .... with my parents. I have a big sister and she lifes in Germany too. My Hobby is dancing, but I like to play badminton too. I love animals. I have a cat and a dog. So I would like to tell you about my dog Molly. Molly is a female Chow Chow and she is 8 years old. Her hair is long and orange. Usually I need more than 1 hour to comb her hair, but she likes that. She doesn't like to play with toys, because she is to lazy for that, but when I go for a walk with her, we always go more than 5 km. Molly love taking a bath and eating cookies.

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Korrektur lesen in Englisch?

Hallo liebe Community,

ich möchte mich bei einer Au-Pair Familie bewerben und mein Anschreiben auf Englisch schreiben. Es wäre sehr lieb wenn jemand das Korrektur lesen könnte.

Vielen Lieben Dank

Dear , , and

my name is and I'm a student from Germany. I just read your profile and it sounded pretty sympathetic.

At the moment I'm attending senior classes and I would love to belong to your family from on. As you can read on my profile I have a little brother and an older sister and I like to spend time with them or my friends.

Your two little boys would definitely beat me in chess but that doesn't matter I think.

I like to play Lego as well because I and my little brother are really fascinated to build new buildings or cars together.

I would describe me as an active person. I have a dog and take her every day for a walk, either by feet or by bicycle.

I also have my driving license and could drive them to school if that is needed. Since my mother tongue is german there should be no problem to teach and German. I'm also learning Spanish for 2 years in school now and can speak it a little and hope to improve my skills when I'm at yours.

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England austausch Bewerbung gut so?

Hello! My name is *** and I am thirteen years old. Together with my parents and my two years older brother, I live in a house with a big garden. We have got one little dog called ***. My hometown is ***. In my free time I often play football. Meeting friends like *** *** and surfing in the internet are also one of my favorite leisure activities. My favorite subjects are all languages. I am not so happy with subjects concerning to numbers like Maths and Physics. My family and my friends say about me that I am reliable, polite and I have a good behavior. Although I have travelled through many countries, I have never been in England before. For me the exchange would not only mean having fun but the possibility to make acquaintance with a new country and interesting people. I I would be very glad to take part at the exchange with ***(my school)

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Written discussion

Hallo wir haben als hausaufgabe aufbekommen eine written discussion zu schreiben. Ich hab mal eine geschrieben könntet ihr den mal durchlesen und meine fehler korrigieren oder verbesserungen vorschlagen?

Thema:Mobile phones have become an important part of our lives.More than 90% of german teenagers have a mobile phone of their own.What are the advantages and disadvantages of using mobile phones?

Mobile phones have become an important part of our lives. More than 90 % of German teenagers have a mobile phone. But is a mobile phone really important? Here are advantages and disadvantages of using mobile phones.

My first argument against mobile phones is that the most teenagers use a mobile phone in the lesson. They play games and send emails or short messages to someone. So they are they are distracted from the lesson and get bad marks.

The next point is, that some people can’t stop using mobile phones. They get addicted.They lose their social contacts and spend all their time on their mobile phones.A good example is my friends brother, he haven’t got social contacts he is all the time write short messages or calls to friends.

The last point is that mobile phones are unhealthy. I have heard in many television reports that mobile phones can be cause of cancer.

On the other hand there are arguments for the using of mobile phones too.

Firstly you are very flexible. You can use it everywhere at any time.For example you are waiting for the next train and you are bored, you can use your mobile phone. You can listen to music,play games or go online when you have an Internet flat. More Important is that the mobile phone is helpful in case of emergency.If something happen on the way to school or somewhere else you can call to the emergency.

The most important is that you are always be in contact with your friends and your family. So your parents mustn’t care where you are. With one call they can know it.

After looking at both sides I’m in the opinion that mobile phones are important for the most people.

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