So Englisch-Experten, ihr seid wieder gefragt, Englisch-Essay!

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Ja okay ich tu's mir mal an weil ich grad nix besseres zu tun hab :P Hier meine veränderte Version (trotzdem nicht perfekt, ich würd andere Absätze machen undso hab aber hauptsächlich Grammatik Sätze und Wörter verändert)

One of the biggest current problems concerning our planet is the phenomenon known as global warming.

Global warming is a result of the utilization of fossil fuels for energy, which emit carbon dioxide when burned. The production of carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases changes the environment. It tremendously heats up the temperature of the atmosphere and the consequences are not only disastrous for human life, but for the planet's vegetation and animals as well. This leads to deforestation. (Wie führt global warming zu deforestation?? macht iwie keinen Sinn würd ich auslassen :P) Deforestation is fatal due to the fact that rainforests are a crucial part of climate regulation.

Not only the deforestation caused by human beings, but also overpopulation and the resulting destruction of entire ecosystems are among the greatest threats to biodiversity. If we regard the myriad of problems caused by climate change, it is evident that change in our actions and way of life is highly necessary. Due to rising sea levels, which could result in the flooding of low-lying coastal areas such as Egypt, the Netherlands, and Bangladesh, some countries might even disappear under water completely.

Another problem caused by global warming is a drastic change in weather patterns, resulting in an increased amount of hurricanes, floods, and other natural disasters.

In addition to that, a problem frequently associated with global warming is its effect on animals. The extinction of many endangered species has been caused mainly by the upsurge of sea levels and by deforestation. For example, coastal fish populations could be potentially affected, while tropical disease-spreading insects might experience better breeding conditions, leading to their numbers increasing significantly

There are several things we can do to help ameliorate the situation. One advance would be to reduce the amount of carbon dioxide emissions by replacing oil, coal and gas energy sources with renewable energy. Furthermore, we should try to use environmentally friendly cars instead of depending on vehicles that emit greenhouse gases. Another very simple solution is to plant more trees. These make use of carbon dioxide for their own metabolism, transmitting oxygen instead of harmful gases into the atmosphere. Also, one can recycle more products and use less energy in general as generating electricity is one of the main causes of harmful gas emissions.

To sum up, it can be stated that what humans have done to this planet is obviously catastrophic. To achieve substantial results, scientists, governments and us individuals must work together.

One of the biggest problem

facing the world and many scientists are concerned about is global warming. The production of carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases changes the environment. It’s (Kurzformen in der Schriftsprache meiden.) having a heating effect on the atmosphere, and the consequences couldn’t be only (Position) dangerous for human life kein Komma; hier hehlt etwas.) for our vegetation and animals too.

This leads us to an important source of the world’s destroying, the disforestation of the rainforest. These forests are very necessary to regulate our climate.

It’s (s.o.) not only (---) disforestation caused by human being, (---) overpopulation and the resulting destruction of entire ecosystems Hier fehlt etwas. are the greatest threats to biodiversity. If we look at all the problems caused by the climate change, we’ll (s.o.)
maybe realize to change something finally.

kein neuer Satz Such as rising sea levels, which could result in the flooding of low lying coastal areas and cities, for example Egypt, the Netherlands, and Bengladesh (Das sind aber keine Städte.),

Neuer Satz some countries might even disappear completely! Another problem caused by global warming, where you can clearly see the climate change, are changes in weather patterns, with the result that many areas of the world are experiencing

increased hurricanes, floods, and other unusual weather Hier fehlt etwas. A third problem associated with global warming is the (besser: Possessive Pronomen effect on animals, (---) species extinction. Many rare species will become extinct, especially from (---) disforestation of the rainforest. In addition, fish populations could be affected, while some insects Komma which spread disease
Komma might become more common.

Well, there are several things (Ausdruck) we can do to solve the problem of global warming, such as to stop producing CO2 by switching from oil, coal and gas to renewable energy. Furthermore, we should switch to local traffic, going by bike and avoid taking the plane. Another solution is to plant more trees.They absorb carbon dioxide and don’t (s.o.) produce greenhouse gases. A third solution is to use less energy and to recycle more products. If we do that Komma we will produce less CO2, because generating electricity is one of the main sources of carbon dioxide.

To sum up, I can say that (---) people should wake up and realize what we already did to the world. I think if we make small changes now, we can avoid huge environmental changes in the future Neuer Satz therefore, scientists, governments and individuals must work together to overcome this threat.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert oder sollte geändert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.

AstridDerPu

Schönen Dank! Aber warum muss ich denn einen Absatz machen zwischen bei dem Einleitungssatz ? Und was ist an disforestation falsch?

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@Drumer1998

Auch schade, dass du mir nicht genau sagen kannst WAS ich bei den fettgedruckten Wörtern/Ausdrücken ändern sollte. Benutzt wurden Wörterbücher vom Internet...

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Hier und da kleine Fehler, aber sonst OK. Soll ich noch alle Fehler auflisten ?

Ehm ja wäre cool!

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