Patricia Summary, grammatik, welche besser, hilfe?
Welches der Beiden wäre besser und wo wären die Grammatikalischen Fehler? Kann die mir bitte jemand korrigieren? Es ist einfach nur zur Übung für meine kommende Englischklausur.
The shortstory ‚Patricia’ written by Fraser Sutherland deals with two friends, where the boy has a crush on the girl, but never told it, until a spring dance in their school comes. He forces himself to ask her, to go with her to the dance and does it, but she declines his question and at the end, both go not to the dance and go different ways too.
The shortstory ‘Patricia’ written by Fraser Sutherland deals with two friends, where the boy has a crush on the girl, but never told it. In their school there goes a spring dance and the boy forces himself to ask her, to go with her to the dance, does it, but she just diclines his question and at the end, both of them, go not to the dance and go different ways too.
"both go not to the dance "
Das ist sicherlich falsch.
Habe ich Fehler bei im Text englisch?
Ich muss als Hausaufgabe eine zusammfassung von einen Text machen und ich wollte fragen ob es so richtig ist:
The story is about the girl Nina and it’s her birthday. Her brother David and some friends planned a trip to the Kakadu National Park as a birthday surprise. The group has an argument about what to do. Nina and Mike want to go swimming in a freshwater billabong, but David disagrees. He worries about salt water crocodiles which could be there. They arrive at the park and the rest of the day went normal. At the next day the group does some rock climbing, but while they do this, Mike and Nina disappeare. David and Cathy worry and David hurt his foot. After much waiting time they come back to the other both. When Nina is alone with David, she tells him that she and Mike were at a lower pool, but than a crocodile appeared at the other side. They ran and climbed a rock, so nothing fatal happened. Nevertheless it was a big shock.
Was könnte ich bei diesen summary über den text "paranoid park" im green line besser machen?
Es wäre nett, wenn ihr mal drüber schauen könntet und mich auf Fehler hinweist und mir vielleicht Verbesserungstipps zur gebt.
The book 'Paranoid Park' was written by Blake Nelson, which was published in year 2006 in Portland, Oregon. The text deals with a young skater names Alex, who is doing illegal things, and who kills a security guard in self defense.
The young skater is the main character of the story. He is 16 years old. And is at his uncle Tommy's beach house.
One evening he decides to go there with his best friend Jared, but Jared wants to see his girlfriend and so he doesn't go with Alex to Paranoid Park.
Alex decides to go alone to Paranoid Park and when he is there, he sits on his skateboard and watches the skaters and girls there.
A streeter called Scratch comes along with his friends and after a short talk Scratch asks Alex whether he wants to hop a train.
Fascinated by the idea of hopping train Alex agrees and they leave Paranoid Park.
While riding the train, they are seen by a security guard who immediately chases them and starts to hit Scratch with his nightstick.
After Alex sees that he hits the security guard with his skateboard.
The man stumbles and falls forward on the gravel beside the train.
The coming train pulls him along and he is twisted into an awkward position under the train.
After the train has passed, the security guard has been cut in half.
After this horrible accident Alex is totally in panic and he doesn't know what he should do in a situation like that.
He is totally confused, because he wants to tell the police but he is too afraid of the consequences and he decides to keep first that accident to himself.
Totally confused the main character starts to run....
Summary + Characterisation, korrektur, dringend?
Summery's: The shortstory ‚Patricia’ written by Fraser Sutherland deals with two friends, where the boy has a crush on the girl, but never told it, until a spring dance in their school comes. He forces himself to ask her, to go with her to the dance and does it, but she declines his question and at the end, both go not to the dance and go different ways too.
The shortstory ‘Patricia’ written by Fraser Sutherland deals with two friends, where the boy has a crush on the girl, but never told it. In their school there goes a spring dance and the boy forces himself to ask her, to go with her to the dance, does it, but she just diclines his question and at the end, both of them, go not to the dance and go different ways too
was wirkt besser und richtiger, zumindest einigermaßen?
Characterisation The following text is a characterisation of the boy, one of the two main characters in the story ‘Patricia’.
The boy is a student around 16 or 17 years, how it could be assumed, because he is close to his final exams (l. 55) and his voice breaks and so ‘He [is] changing’(fg.l. 19). Furthermore the character seems to be very sporty and active, just look at the scene, where he stands in front of the mirror and ‘[looks] at himself’ and his muscles (fg.l.5) - what means, that he must be ambious too, because he worked hard, to get them. The boy could be characterized as really attentive, how the behavior shows it, related to Patricia (fg. l.7-19). ‘He [spend] an hour talking with her’ and ‘[think] a lot about asking her to go [with him]’, but he have not the guts to say directly, that he wants to go with her to the spring dance, what makes him not self-confident.
To sum it up, the boy is ambious as related to Particia, but calm, without selfconfidence, but (Mir fällt nicht ein, wie es genau zusammenfassen könnte :x)
Hey, wir sollen diese hier beim Lehre abgeben und es wäre nett, wenn ihr einmal drüberschauen würdet
Summary about the Text “The fall dance“:
These text “The fall dance“is about one boy, who thinks he never would invite to the fall dance in November. The boy, his name is Jose, comes sometimes too late to classes and for this reason he often gets detention, that is why he misses 3 times the maths class in one semester. Jose is not the type of boys, who are popular, he is the type of unpopular boys. In this November is the Fall Dance and girls can choose boys to dance with them. Jose doesn’t think someone would ask him for a date, because he had since grade 7 NO date. But one day a pencil is in his locker, normally only band geeks get pencils. The Pencil is from Brittany, this is one of the cheerleaders. She is famous and looks very hot. But in the afternoon he gets a call by Tiffany. Tiffany is a girl, who looks very good, too. So Jose think both of that two, very hot girls, want a date with him. Tiffany is be peeved about Jose, because she has sending him the pencil, but Brittany has said ‘oh it’s from me’ that’s a lie. Tiffany is very sad, because she really want to go with Jose on a date.
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In the factual text “Bullying in school” written by CarrieAnn13 taken from the website teenik.com the author says that everyone is included in bullying. In her argumentation she makes clear how the person, who being bullied, feels and wants to tell us that we must do something against bullying. CarrieAnn13 writes about the effect of bullying and that everyone is every time included in this, if you don’t help the bullied. She describes that bullying can happen in school and because of this it is responsibility for the students to save their classmates. At the end Carrie Ann mentioned that you only can stop bullying when you talk about it with other students.