Motivationsschreiben für Auslandsstudium. was haltet ihr davon?
Ich habe ein Motivationsschreiben auf Englisch für mein Auslandsstudium verfasst und wollte euch fragen ,ob das grammatikalisch und sprachlich her korrekt ist? Ich würde mich sehr über eure ehrliche Meinung freuen:)
Dear Ladies and Gentlemen, I really appreciate your international university which is known for it
s high qualified and individual education. Another interestiung aspect is that many different cultures meet each other in your university. This makes your university really special and unique in Valenica, the city of sciences and arts. Since I was a child I always wanted to help people who suffer from illness. My father is a dentist and my idol. Everytime after school I went to his dental clinic and watched how he worked in his everday life. I gained there a lot of experience about the treatment with patients and the usage of the instruments. With time my interest for dentistry grew more and I started working as a dental technician in my fathers dental laboratory. There I prepared mouthguards and dental prosthesis for the patients. My motoric skills have improved and I got fit in the work. Later I started many internships in dental clinics and I also worked 3 months in a hospital. It was a great experience for me to watch all the operations and help the ill people. I showed my empathy and helpfulness. There I realized that nothing makes me happier then helping patients to get healthy again. Besides I also lived 1 year in Dubai, where I went to the ,,German International School Dubai". There I met various cultures and nationalities. I am a very social and emphatic man who is not narrow minded. Thats why I always patiently listen to the opinion of other people . I want to study at your faculty because you offer a great professional education and I am sure that with your modern teaching I will reach my dream to become a great dentist. I am convinced that I am competent to study at your faculty because I am a team-oriented person and will always do my best to reach my goal. While I am doing my sports and working in the dental laboratory, I also started learning spanish. My ambition and my self orientation never let me give up. I am looking forward to an invitation to a personal meeting.
"interestiung" ... interesting .Flüchtigkeit...
Ansonsten... Deinen Lebenslauf möchte ich haben... Deine (reichen) Eltern übrigens auch.
Aber hört sich perfekt an. Sehr gut geschrieben. Wer da nicht weich wird...
Und spanisch willst Du auch noch lernen... bist schon dabei... Ich habe immer davon geträumt das zu lernen... DU wirst es lernen.
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