Kontrolliert bitte meinen englischen Argumentativen Text?

Argumentative Text English

Learning foreign languages is part of school. Pupils in Germany start learning the first one in primary school and the following middle-high school ads at least another. 'At least' because later in school you have to chose between another foreign language or a new subject which is provided by the school. Many pupils choose a new language which leads to them learning 3 foreign languages. Nearly at the end of school most of them deselct all foreign languages except one. So why spent your time and learn so many in the first place? In the following text I want to tell you why we shouldnt be required to have to learn so many.

English is the world language so it is enough to have only it as foreign language. Over 1 billion people speak english. The mosg popular foreign languages teached in school are french/spanish, italian and latin. But only around 300 milion speak french, 65 milion italian and latin is basically a dead language. You could speak english and more people would understand you than if youʻd speak another.

For many pupils school is already stressful and adding a new language makes it even worse. You have to learn new pronouns, words, how to conjugate and many rules. Having the languages sound familiar doesnʻt help, but only confuses. So doesn't it make more sense to only learn one foreign language and do it intensively so you can nearly speak it fluent, than to learn many and not being really good at any?

By choosing to do one thing you can't do another, it comes at the expense of something else. Or in other words: you can't have it all. If we spend our time learning languages which we will most likely forget later, we donʻt/canʻt spend our time with something we will actually need or do things we have a passion for. For example, I would love to not learn french in school and rather do more art classes, because I want to be a designer later. I would have more time at home to study for an other school subject or do things I enjoy doing.

Of course is knowing more languages probably better for career oppurtunities but it really depends on what you are planing on doing as a job. For some people it is probably better to know more languages but for others it isn't. Also are languages not the first thing they would decide of, if there are other things you are very good it.

In conclusion, schools should provide the possibilty for students to decide which languages they want and need to spend their time on and what they don't. But of course all students would have do learn at least one foreign language, to which english would be the best option. 

Hätte jemand vllt auch eine Idee für einen Titel? Und vllt auch irgendwelche Ideen für Formulierungen, so dass der Text ein bisschen komplizierter klingt? :)

Vielen dank schonmal!!

Answer 1

[AstridDerPu]

Hallo,

der Text enthält einige Rechtschreib-, Grammatik-, Formulierungs-, Satzbau- und Interpunktionsfehler.

Länderadjektive zum Beispiel werden im Englischen immer großgeschrieben.

Die Textlänge sprengt hier allerdings den Rahmen, deshalb belasse ich es bei diesen Anmerkungen.

AstridDerPu

Answer 2

[Anonymer255]

Also der Text passt was mir leider fehlt ist der Slang, das ist typisches Schulenglisch funktioniert zwar aber das ist so künstlich