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“You can’t uninvent something once it’s been invented”
There are many inventions, for example nuclear weapons or some other dangerous stuff, that most people aren’t lucky about their existing. So a wise man someday said: “You can’t uninvent something once it’s been invented”, but is he really right with his statement? Many bad inventions are forbidden by the state and his laws, to stop people’s contact with them. If they use something like that anyhow, they go to prison, because it’s illegal. There they’ll think about what they’ve done, which maybe is a good thing and really helps to wipe out some wicked inventions. On the other hand, there are many discoveries, for example prohibited drugs, which will ever exist, whether if they are super dangerous, because people are addicted to them and don’t interest in their risks. So some inventions can be limited on this legal way, but they’ll never completely disappear. As another point, you can say that nowadays it’s quite easy to keep your thoughts secret, because there are many ways to save your own ideas. But if some of your thoughts find their way to the internet it’s nearly impossible to get it out of there again, because the internet never forgets and other people’s minds as well. So finally I would say, that if there’s a new invention, it doesn’t take a long time to spread it, but if this is done it’s also not possible to remove these ideas from mankind. So if you ask me I would say, that if you’ve got a great idea for some new stuff, you should try to keep it safe, until you are sure it’s the right time to bring it forward.
Vielen Dank (:
You can’t uninvent something once it’s been invented”
There are many inventions, for example nuclear weapons or some other
dangerous stuff, that most people aren’t lucky (Wort) about their existing (Formulierung). So a wise man someday (Wort) said: “You can’t uninvent something once it’s been invented”, but is he really right with his statement (Formulierung)? Many bad inventions are forbidden by the state (Wort) and his (Pronomen) laws (kein Komma) to stop people’s contact with them.
If they use something like that anyhow, they go to prison (kein Komma) because it’s illegal. (kein neuer Satz) There they’ll think about what they’ve done, which maybe is (Formulierung) a good thing and really helps to wipe out some wicked inventions.
(Hier weiß man nicht mehr, wer mit they, them und their gemeint ist.)
On the other hand, there are many discoveries, for example prohibited drugs, which will ever (Wort) exist, whether if they are super dangerous (kein Komma) because people are addicted to them and don’t interest (Grammatik)
in their risks. So some inventions can be limited on this legal way (Formulierung), but they’ll never completely disappear. As another point (Formulierung), you can say that nowadays it’s quite easy to keep your thoughts secret (kein Komma) because there are many ways to save your own ideas. But if some of your thoughts find
their way to the internet it’s nearly impossible to get it (Grammatik) out of there
again (kein Komma) because the internet never forgets and other people’s minds as well (Sinn?).
So finally (Komma) I would say (kein Komma) that if there’s a new invention, it doesn’t take (---) long (---) to spread it, (neuer Satz) but if this is done it’s also not
possible to remove these ideas from mankind. So if you ask me (Komma) I would
say (kein Komma) that if you’ve got a great idea for some new stuff, you should try
to keep it safe, until you are sure it’s the right time to bring it forward (Wort).
- Variiere bei den Satzanfängen (zu oft So)
- Vermeide Bandwurmsätze.
Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,
für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de - und Finger weg vom Google Übelsetzer und seinen tr.tteligen Kollegen!.
Written Discussion "Would you like to live in Mumbai". Könnte mir jmand die Discussion verbessern?
Könntet ihr den Text verbessern ?. Ich shreib morgen ne Arbeit und ich find den nicht so gut und würde mich auf ein Feedback freuen.
**Today I am writing about the question „would you like to live in Mumbai?”. I think it´s a good question, because there a many Arguments for and against.
My first Argument for living in Mumbai is, that if you speak English, you can manage everything in the city. It is not necessary to speak the regional language. For example, …. Second argument is that India is one of few countries, where even people can have a maid or a chauffeur. You are able to afford them. In addition you can send your child to school. Because there are German, American and English schools. Another Argument for is that Mumbai is a city for shopaholics. There are designer closets much cheaper than in Germany. The qualities from the Materials are good. Tough the crime rate is high, so you can robbed in the city. The city has good transport options, for instance local trains, metro, monorail and public transport buses. No other city can sustain this much population and traffic. Nevertheless is there the rush hour. The Streets are crowded and it tooks a long time to come to the destination. My last argument is that the food in Mumbai is very delicious. You can eat in small restaurants, on the street or in very good restaurants to try out different cuisines. However you have to pay attention with food.
To sum up, the people in the city are very friendly and they will help you every time, when you need. I think I would like to live in Mumbai It´s a fascinating city with colorful festivals. **
Was hätte ich bei dieser englisch Analyse besser machen können?
At central age it might happen that a teenager want to go for example to the USA for a gab year. But is it right that being abroad can change your knowledge about the host country and the competence in the target language? By way of introduction it is important to say that this analyse based on the report 'Memories from Reitlingen' by Emma Brighton from the website of UK-German Connection. Going abroad is a good opportunity to learn something about the foreign country that you will never learn in another way. You can change your knowledge about the host country like Emma. She write in her blog that the houses were very big. 'Giant basement' line 5. Moreover to make a gab year can show what is going on at school there. You only find out whether the students there wear school uniforms if you see it with your own eyes. Emma talks about it in her block. She also write that the Students at German schools have 'more freedom', line 23 because they can leave the school if they don't have lessons because 'lessons is cancelled rather than taken by a cover teacher' line 25. Going abroad can help you every day to learn more about the language. If you listen to other people if they are talking, you can learn more about the colloquial and you can pick up useful words. Emma sees this likewise in line 12. To go at school in a foreign country can help you to find new friends and if you have friends you see something about her hobbies and interests. For example Emma goes with her friends to the German 'Freibad' and was absolutely ´surprise because she don't know before that in Germany is something like this, line 29 until 36. In conclusion it is important to say that going abroad is a good chance to know more about the host country. By way of friends and sometimes also if you watch TV you can learn more about your target language. In this context you get experiences if you go abroad.
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In Britain, children and teenagers can be given an ASBO if they do anything that is an antisocial behavior. It’s a way of punishing them for their actions instead of going to prison or similar punishments. An ASBO consists of several punishments like being forbidden to go to different areas of a town or to meet specific people.
The problem with ASBO’s is that they can give the person depression because they are socially isolated. Consequently, this can lead to self harm or depression in the worst cases. Secondly, their actions aren’t primarily punished they are prevented so that the child/teen won’t do it anymore. Furthermore, the things that are reported aren’t necessarily illegal sometimes it’s just something that might be annoying to others, like tattoos. Having said that, this might just be a way of showing personality. Reportedly, it has happened that someone was just given an ASBO because he looked scary and was always wearing a hood. Another thing to add is that the pictures that are hung up around town can be really embarrassing and can lead to harassment by others. On the other hand, ASBOS also have advantages. Many teenagers have their problems with school, friends etc. This might lead to some illegal actions like drinking or smoking. In addition to that, there often is some kind of group pressure. ASBO’s are a way of showing them that their actions are wrong and that there is a solution to their problems. For instance, it’s a way of identifying that their actions have been wrong. Another key thing to remember is that ASBO’s can keep the children/teenagers from going to prison and that would be way worse.
All things considered, I think that ASBO’s can be good for the young people to change their antisocial behavior. That way, they can understand that their actions have been wrong and change them for good.
Outsourcing - Globalisation
Hallo meine Lieben,
habe einen Text im Bezug auf Outsourcing geschrieben. Fällt euch im Bezug auf Globalised Outsourcing noch etwas ein ? Und bitte seid so lieb und korrigiert den Text falls möglich :) Danke schonmal :)
Outsourcing is the act of one company contracting with another company to provide services that might otherwise be performed by in-house employees. Often the tasks that are outsourced could be performed by the company itself, but in many cases there are financial advantages that come from outsourcing. Many large companies now outsource jobs such as call center services, e-mail services, and payroll.
There are many reasons that companies outsource various jobs, but the most prominent advantage seems to be the fact that it often saves money. Many of the companies that provide outsourcing services are able to do the work for considerably less money, as they don't have to provide benefits to their workers and have fewer overhead expenses to worry about. Depending on location, it may also be more affordable to outsource to companies located in different countries.
• Some people can move easily from country to country. • Many people who dont have a good education get the opportunity to get better jobs. • Companies can produce their products much cheaper and outsource their production into other countries.
• Many people who have a good education lose their jobs because they are more expensive than guest workers from developing countries. • Traditions as well as culture get lost. • There is no high living standard anymore.