Ist diese englische Argumentation gut? Was kann ich besser machen? BITTE SCHNELL ANTWORTEN!
Hallo, ich schreibe morgen eine Klassenarbeit, in der ich eine Argumentation auf Englisch schreiben muss. Wahrscheinlich darüber, ob Schüler freien Internetzugang haben sollen. Könnt ihr mir sagen, ob dieser Text gut ist und was ich besser machen kann? Danke :)
More and more students have a free internet access at home. A study tells the people that every fifth student is more than four hours a day on the internet. Is it OK that students have a free internet access on their computer?
The most parents think that it‘s OK because their children can work with it, they look for example after vocabulary or they can visit web sites like Wikipedia because it‘s easier than look it up in a dictionary. Another argument for this thesis is that students can contact their friends on Facebook, ICQ or other chat portals. Teachers also can upload some school stuff like exercises or tests on school portals like Lo-Net. Another significant point is that students can educate themselves by reading in various forums and articles.
It is important to mention that not all is well on the internet. The first argument against this thesis is that it‘s dangerous to give away personal data or make something public. If a student has a job interview, his/her employer can find out personal data, for example embarrassing pictures from the last party, on platforms like Facebook or Myspace. A teenager also can be interested for pedophiles. They chat with them and want to meet them. They often want to know their address because they want to stalk them. Another argument against it is that there are some web sites that aren‘t allowed for people. Many web sites on the internet are illegal and there isn‘t an advice. On these web sites people can watch the movies that are normally at the cinemas now or they can download music for free. In these downloaded folders is a computer virus and a virus can break down your computer. Another significant point against a free internet access for teenagers is that they can depend on it. Every fifth student is more than four hours a day on the internet.
Finally, it can be said that every parents have to decide themselves whether they allow their children to have free internet access. I think that the internet is very useful for school or or chatting with friends, but you have to pay attention what you make public and on which web sites you are.