kann man schnell jemand über den englisch text schnell schauen ob der grammatikalisch und allgemein so in Ordnung ist, Danke im vorraus?
When I was in elementary school, there was a shy black boy who got insulted by 3 classmates on the schoolyard. The black boy was 11 years old and had no friends. He was always alone at the schoolyard. Those other three boys were 12 years old and popular in school. Each day, when he came to school he was getting annoyed and was insulted as negro. After a few weeks he started crying and was afraid to go to school, whereupon the teacher came to him and asked what was going on. The boy told him, that he gets bullied and insulted each day. His mother got to know his situation and was completely horrified, whereupon she arranged an appointment with the teacher. Then the teacher invited those three boys into his room and talked to them to stop the insults, otherwise he would contact their parents. He also asked them to do him a favor and apologize for their mistakes. After a while things changed and year later all of them became friends.
- who got insulted: Ist Umgangssprache. Je nachdem, an wen sich der Text richtet, solltest du vielleicht "who was insulted" verwenden.
- "Those other three boys" hört sich komisch an. Ich würde "The three other boys" nehmen.
- Nach "Each day" kein Komma, das kommt wenn dann hinter "when he came to school". Hier und weiter unten würde ich generell "Every day" und nicht "Each day" schreiben, aber "Each day" sollte nicht falsch sein.
- Nach "The boy told him" kein Komma
- Ich persönlich würde "The teacher then invited" sagen und nicht "Then the teacher invited" (dein Satzanfang hört sich zu langweilig an)
- "told them", nicht "talked to them"
- "a year later" und nicht nur "year later"
Sonst sollte das so ungefähr gehen.
Scheint alles richtig zu sein
Summary + Characterisation, korrektur, dringend?
Summery's: The shortstory ‚Patricia’ written by Fraser Sutherland deals with two friends, where the boy has a crush on the girl, but never told it, until a spring dance in their school comes. He forces himself to ask her, to go with her to the dance and does it, but she declines his question and at the end, both go not to the dance and go different ways too.
The shortstory ‘Patricia’ written by Fraser Sutherland deals with two friends, where the boy has a crush on the girl, but never told it. In their school there goes a spring dance and the boy forces himself to ask her, to go with her to the dance, does it, but she just diclines his question and at the end, both of them, go not to the dance and go different ways too
was wirkt besser und richtiger, zumindest einigermaßen?
Characterisation The following text is a characterisation of the boy, one of the two main characters in the story ‘Patricia’.
The boy is a student around 16 or 17 years, how it could be assumed, because he is close to his final exams (l. 55) and his voice breaks and so ‘He [is] changing’(fg.l. 19). Furthermore the character seems to be very sporty and active, just look at the scene, where he stands in front of the mirror and ‘[looks] at himself’ and his muscles (fg.l.5) - what means, that he must be ambious too, because he worked hard, to get them. The boy could be characterized as really attentive, how the behavior shows it, related to Patricia (fg. l.7-19). ‘He [spend] an hour talking with her’ and ‘[think] a lot about asking her to go [with him]’, but he have not the guts to say directly, that he wants to go with her to the spring dance, what makes him not self-confident.
To sum it up, the boy is ambious as related to Particia, but calm, without selfconfidence, but (Mir fällt nicht ein, wie es genau zusammenfassen könnte :x)
Kann mir wer diese englische Zusammenfassung korrigieren?
`The Absolutely True Diay of a part time Indian´ is the abridged adapted version from the novel by Sherman Alexie and is about an Indian Boy. who is going on a all-white-school In the first paragraph, Arnold is flirting with Penelope. She is telling him her dreams, but Arnold laughing at her. He is asking her, what she really want to do with her life. Then she´s telling him, her real dreams. She´s wanting to be a architect. Arnold doesn´t lauhging at her, because it´s his drem too.
In the second paragraph Arnold and Penelope are going with roger and his friends to a diner. He is ordering many things for Penelope and him. But he is sad, because he haven´t money. He is poor. As Arnold going to the toilett, he tells Roger that he has forget his wallet, but Arnold is lying. Roger is understanding and lending him the money. At the school Penelope telling him, that she´s knwoing that he has lending money from roger. She´s asking him, whether he is poor and he didn´t lying to her. Penelope telling it roger and he helping him in the future. Now Arnold knowing that he doesn´t need to lie.
Danke schonmal im vorraus,
Ps: Die Aufgabe war ein Text zusammenzufassen und das in der Jetzt Form
Kann mir jemand dieses summary von "A message from the Pig-man" korrigieren?
habe eine summary zum text a message from the pig-man von john wain geschrieben, wäre nett wenn ihr eure meinung dazu äußern würdet und ggf fehler verbessern könntet oder zumindest sagen, wo sie sind :)
The story „A Message from the Pig-man“, written by John Wain, is about a 6-year old boy named Eric, which has many questions he would like to ask but is afraid to do so.
Eric is the son of newly divorced parents. He has no siblings and his mum has a new boyfriend named Donald. He has difficulty with the new circumstances and does not understand why his father had to leave just because Donald moved in. He also does‘nt mind sharing his room in order for his dad to have the spare room. He is afraid of the pig-man and avoids him. He imagines the pig-man as a man who looks like a pig. One day, his mother asks him to catch the pig-man to bring him the scarps. First he was afraid, but when he sees the pig-man he realizes that the pig-man is a normal person and finally understands that the people call him pig-man, because he has some pigs that he looks after. Eric is no longer afraid of asking questions. When he comes home, he asks his mother why his father can‘t stay with them but his mother does‘nt answer him. Now he thinks that grown-ups are very silly and he hates them all.
Englisch Referat: Kann sich jemand den Text zur Kontrolle durch lesen?
Also hallo erstmal!
ICh halte bald eine Buchvorstellung in Englisch und wollte fragen ob sich jemand vielleicht mal mein Text durchlesen kann. Wäre echt nett!
hier ist der text:
The Story Looking for Alaska tells about a boy, called Miles Halter. At the very beginning of the book Miles lives with his parents in Florida where he also goes to school. At school he’s an outsider and doesn’t really have friends, so he spends most of the time reading biographies of famous people remembering their last words. Miles reads a book about François Rabelais whose last words were: I go to seek a Great Perhaps. Miles doesn’t want to wait until he dies to start seeking a Great Perhaps so he decides to leave his old school and go to Culver Creek, an Alabama boarding school, where his dad went to when he was young. At Culver Creek, Miles meets his roommate Chip, nicknamed ‘the Colonel’, and Alaska Young, a beautiful, rebellious girl Miles is immediately attracted to. As Miles is so skinny Chip decides to call him ‘Pudge’. Miles also meets Takumi, a Japanese boy. Chip, Takumi and Alaska become Miles new friend as they accept him the way he is. At Culver Creek there is a kind of a war between the so called Weekday Warriors, the children of wealthy families who return home every weekend, and those who actually live at school. They all play pranks on each other pretty often, but more about that later. On the first school day Miles get to know Dr Hyde, the teacher for World Religions, and Miles immediately likes him. In the afternoon Alaska, Chip and Takumi show Miles the ‘Smoking Hole’. The ‘Smoking Hole’ is a safe place to smoke without being caught. It’s obvious that Miles likes Culver Creek, because he has got new friends. The days go by without much happening. But then one day Alaska tells Miles that she has found a girlfriend for him, so she plans a triple date with her and her boyfriend Jake, Chip and his girlfriend Sara, and Miles and Lara. Lara is from Romania and really nice. The date isn’t as successful as they hoped it would be, because while watching a basketball game at the gym, Miles is hit by a ball. He has a concussion, vomits on Lara’s jeans and is then taken to a hospital. But also for Chip it doesn’t go well because at the end of the triple date Sara breaks up with him. The days after the date are really weird. Alaska is never around and doesn’t talk to anybody. Miles notices that Alaska is a really moody girl, one second she’s nice and flirty and in the next one she freaks out without even having a real reason. In the morning, Dr Hyde gives the students the question for their final exam: What is the most important question human beings must answer? A few days before Thanksgiving Alaska wakes Miles up early to persuade him to stay at school with her over Thanksgiving. Miles first isn’t sure but then calls his parents telling them he has to study for exams, which is a lie. Alaska and Miles are nearly the only students staying at Culver Creek o