Kann jemand meineb Englischen Text über Craig Kielburger korrigieren?

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Nur kurz überflogen aber was mir aufgefallen ist:
He fought against child labour at the age of 12
7 weeks trip

who was taking up the issue of child labour - was willst du damit aussagen?

who fought against child labour

they give gifts - das klingt schrecklich...zum Einen heißt es they gave
 zum Anderen klingt das komisch. Mir fällt auf die Schnelle grad keine Alternative ein, hab auch zu wenig Zeit grad.

Der letzte Satz klingt auch sehr holprig...

Bin kein Experte, aber das hier habe ich gefunden:

-an older brother (an war bei Dir mit Leerzeichen dazwischen)
-he founded "Free the Children" (ich würde es in Anführungszeichen setzen und children war falsch geschrieben)
- he red an article (Du hast geschrieben has read)
-Neapl? Wohl eher Nepal?
-the people who fought (fight hast Du geschrieben)
-They gave gifts...(nicht give)

Ich hoffe, ich konnte helfen

mit read hatte er/sie recht...du kannst nicht red nehmen für lesen. Read wird einfach anders ausgesprochen in der Vergangenheitsform aber genauso geschrieben.

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Nelson Mandela Referat auf englisch

Was kann ich noch dazu schreiben und was kann ich verbessern? bitte hift mir hab morgen prüfung

Good afternoon Mrs Kimmerle and Mrs Kinzer, today im gonna tell you something about Nelson Mandela. Nelson Rolihahla Mandela was born in Mvezo in South Africa on 18 July 1918. He is one of the most greatest human rights activitis. For his decade-long fight against Apartheid, for which he was under arrest as a political prisoner for 27 years. With his staying power an fighting spirit he set of a political change in South Africa. His determination motivated the people to protest and stand up for their rights, so the opression of the black people in South Africa came to an end. From 1994 until 1999 he was the first democratically elected State President of South Africa and respected as an idol. He was also awarded the Nobel Prize for Freedom for his actions in 1993. Before his presidency, he was a prominent anti-apartheid activist who was involved in the planning of underground-armed resistance activities.As a young student,he became involved in political opposition to the white minority government, espescially in its denial of political,social and economic rights to South Africas black majority.He also study law. He joined the African National Congress (ANC) in 1942 and later its more dynamic youth league.The armed activism was, for Mandela, a last resort; before a certain point he used to be a follower of the non-violent resistance.The point when he decided that violence was neccessary in his fight against Apartheid was when unarmed Demonstrates were shot in the Sharpeville-Massacre and the ANC and other Anti-Apartheid Groups were forbidden in 1960.n 1961, Mandela became the leader of the armed wing of the ANC, the so called “Spear of the Nation”. He coordinated a sabotage campaign against military and government targets, and made plans for a possible guerrilla war if sabotage failed to end apartheid. Nelson wedded three times. From the first two marriages he has got six childiren. He divorced from his first wife at 1957 from his second wife at 1996. On his 80 Birthday he married the widow Graca Machel, who was once married with Samora Machel the former president of Mozambique and supporter of ANC. He lost two sons. The first one died because of a car accident and the second one had got Aids.

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Englisch Text kontrollieren

Hi

könnte evtl. jemand meinen Englischtext kontrollieren bitte? Ich weiß ist jetzt nicht der beste und vieles mehrmals geschrieben aber ich muss 200 Wörter haben^^ Hier der Text über Rassentrennung in Amerika:

Segregation in America

Segregation in America was till the 1960s. Till 1865 the black American had to work as slaves for the white but this ends after the Civil War. Then the Civil Rights Movement began with a leader, who was called Martin Luther King. They didn’t fought with violence, just with speeches and demonstrations. Martin Luther King was murdered in 1968. Now, in America there isn’t segregation any more, but some people are prejudiced against Blacks any more, but I think the situation of African American has improved a lot since the Civil Rights Movement. There are more blacks who have a good education and good jobs. Many blacks are famous sportlers or music and film stars. And besides the President of America is a black one – Barack Obama. So the situation of blacks is much better, but not as good as the situation of whites, because some whites are prejudiced against blacks and so often they don’t get such good jobs as whites. There are more blacks than whites, who haven’t got a good education or who haven’t got a job. And in America, there is still prejudice and discrimination against blacks, because some people think there are criminal or dirty. So the situation of blacks is better than before the Civil Rights Movement, but isn’t such good as the situation of Whites.

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Wann benutzt man im englischen to+infinitiv und wann verb+ing?

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Englisch Bildbeschreibung Analyse

Hi, hab eine Bildbeschreibung und eine Analyse dazu gemacht. Diesmal habe ich mir besonders viel mühe gegeben so wenig Fehler zu machen wie möglich.

The picture of the text....... deals with multiculture and shows different individuals with different backgrounds.In the middle of the picture I can see of woman with a spoon. On the spoon is written "equal rights". The woman is stirring a pot of humanscfrom different countries. On the pot is wirtten "citizenship". The woman and the pot are colossally large. She wears the flag of the USA. The humand on the pot wre very small. Some of the people look happy and some people look bad. In the left side is a man on the pot, who has a knife on his right hand and a flag on his left hand. He looks angry and screams to the woman. The woman looks like the stature of Liberte. Maybe, she stands for freedom. Furthermore, the woman stands for unity because she is stirring the people in the pot to a community. The spoon, which the womsn holds, stands for equal rights. Moreover, the woman is stirring the pot with the spoon, which means thst the individuals with different cultures and backgrounds are treated equally. This shows that no one is prefered because of work, looking, culture or background. She wears the flag of USA. In addition, it shows that the US does not make differences between the citizens. The woman mixes the citizens, which shows that the US is for multiculture. A lot of people in the pot are happy to be a part of the society, but not all. Some people look very sad about what the woman does. One of them is even very angry about the situation.

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Kann mir jemand dieses Summary korrigieren?

The text 'A life in the day' is written by a 27 years-old man who called Skinnyman and lives in north London. It's a interview in which he describe his course of his day. First he tells that he is addicted to cannabis. He provides the dealer, who make money with the addicts. Because the addicts have'nt got money, they were get guns from dealers to get money for the drugs. His lifestyle is'nt normal, because he don't go sleep when it'snormal. It is indifferent when he sleeps and when he wakes up. Also he mentions that he gets a record deal. He loves music and mostly he writes his lyrics in the night, when he has the best ideas. Because of his record deal he has many haters in the ghetto. Most of the people are jealous because thay think that Skinnyman has money, but it isn't the truth. His life is very problematic. He has often problems with the police and other authorities. But it doesn't cares him. He thinks that only his father can tell him what to do, but he left him and his mother early. Also he explains that all his friends went to prison, so he decides to go another way. Nevertheless he have to go to prison for 2 years, but he did 12 months. The reason for that was a conflict with a memeber of London Underground staff. In conclusion he did it and now he wants to held other young kids. So all in all he loves this place, because it's his home. Therefore he doesn't want to leave.

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