Kann jemand den Text korrigieren bitte?
In the following I'm going to deal with the problem of eating disorders there are many people who suffer from it especially girls because they want to have a good figure and don't want to increase. in my opinion it's a serious illness and should be taken seriously by people. we should help these people who have the illness to strengthen their self-confidence
the first point is that everybody should accept their body as it is because everyone is beautiful in their own way
they should stop to eat nothing to get a nice body it has many disadvantages for example it is not good for the body because you're not feed it enough and this harms the body
the second point to mention is that people who have this illness should find a good solution to solve their problem for example they could create a nutrion plan in which they can write how much to eat daily
or they can do sports because so they can improve their Illness and self-confidence . in conclusion I would like to say that I agree with the man and think that eating disorders are serious mental illnesses that need treatment and sympathetic medical help
soll ein comment sein. Danke im Voraus
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Hallo,
auch das Draufklicken macht das Lesen nicht leichter. Du wirst dir schon die Mühe machen müssen, den Text hier reinzuhacken. So ist eine Korrektur viel zu mühsam und aufwändig!
AstridDerPu
In the following I'm going to deal with the problem of eating disorders there are many people who suffer from it especially girls because they want to have a good figure and don't want to increase. in my opinion it's a serious illness and should be taken seriously by people. we should help these people who have the illness to strengthen their self-confidence
the first point is that everybody should accept their body as it is because everyone is beautiful in their own way
they should stop to eat nothing to get a nice body it has many disadvantages for example it is not good for the body because you're not feed it enough and this harms the body
the second point to mention is that people who have this illness should find a good solution to solve their problem for example they could create a nutrion plan in which they can write how much to eat daily
or they can do sports because so they can improve their Illness and self-confidence . in conclusion I would like to say that I agree with the man and think that eating disorders are serious mental illnesses that need treatment and sympathetic medical help
Das kann man sehr schlecht lesen, tipp den Text am besten ab oder mach ein besseres Foto
Eigentlich ganz gut, habe nur ein paar Korrekturen bzgl. Interpunktionen, ausserdem habe ich 1-2 Wörter ersetzt.
In the following I'm going to deal with the problem of eating disorders. There are many people who suffer from it, especially girls because they want to have a good figure and don't want to gain weight. In my opinion it's a serious illness and should be taken seriously by people. We should help those who have the illness to strengthen their self-confidence.
The first point is that everybody should accept their body as it is because everyone is beautiful in their own way.
They should stop to eat nothing to get a nice body as it has many disadvantages; it is not good for the body because you're not feeding it enough and this harms the body
The second point to mention is that people who have this illness should find a good solution to solve their problem, for example they could create a nutrion plan in which they can write how much to eat daily.
Or they can do sports, because so they can improve their wellbeing and self-confidence. In conclusion I would like to say that I agree with the man and think that eating disorders are serious mental illnesses that need treatment and sympathetic medical help.
Kann leider nicht so viel erkennen!
In the following I'm going to deal with the problem of eating disorders there are many people who suffer from it especially girls because they want to have a good figure and don't want to increase. in my opinion it's a serious illness and should be taken seriously by people. we should help these people who have the illness to strengthen their self-confidence
the first point is that everybody should accept their body as it is because everyone is beautiful in their own way
they should stop to eat nothing to get a nice body it has many disadvantages for example it is not good for the body because you're not feed it enough and this harms the body
the second point to mention is that people who have this illness should find a good solution to solve their problem for example they could create a nutrion plan in which they can write how much to eat daily
or they can do sports because so they can improve their Illness and self-confidence . in conclusion I would like to say that I agree with the man and think that eating disorders are serious mental illnesses that need treatment and sympathetic medical help
yes, aber bitte nicht vergessen nach dem Punkt groß zu schreiben!!
Dann tipp ihn vorher ab!
In the following I'm going to deal with the problem of eating disorders there are many people who suffer from it especially girls because they want to have a good figure and don't want to increase. in my opinion it's a serious illness and should be taken seriously by people. we should help these people who have the illness to strengthen their self-confidence
the first point is that everybody should accept their body as it is because everyone is beautiful in their own way
they should stop to eat nothing to get a nice body it has many disadvantages for example it is not good for the body because you're not feed it enough and this harms the body
the second point to mention is that people who have this illness should find a good solution to solve their problem for example they could create a nutrion plan in which they can write how much to eat daily
or they can do sports because so they can improve their Illness and self-confidence . in conclusion I would like to say that I agree with the man and think that eating disorders are serious mental illnesses that need treatment and sympathetic medical help
In the following I'm going to deal with the problem of eating disorders there are many people who suffer from it especially girls because they want to have a good figure and don't want to increase. in my opinion it's a serious illness and should be taken seriously by people. we should help these people who have the illness to strengthen their self-confidence
the first point is that everybody should accept their body as it is because everyone is beautiful in their own way
they should stop to eat nothing to get a nice body it has many disadvantages for example it is not good for the body because you're not feed it enough and this harms the body
the second point to mention is that people who have this illness should find a good solution to solve their problem for example they could create a nutrion plan in which they can write how much to eat daily
or they can do sports because so they can improve their Illness and self-confidence . in conclusion I would like to say that I agree with the man and think that eating disorders are serious mental illnesses that need treatment and sympathetic medical help