Kann jemand bitte meinen englische Text zu "American Dream" korrigieren?
In the essay “What America means to me”, Benjamin Livian defines the American Dream as the ability to freely practice your religion and the equal right to political participation of every American citizens. He also describes the American Dream as the equal opportunities for every American citizens to go from “rags to riches” as long as they work hard to achieve aims. In the following I will assess Livian’s definition of the American Dream. On one side there are many stories of people who succeeded despite the economy, crime, poverty, poor education, and less than ideal homes, for example Bill Gates, President Obama, Mark Zuckerberg, etc. This proves that the US society is a classless society, where everybody can move up and succeed and social background does not decide on where you end up. The State has only few influences on each individual. As a matter of fact, communism or socialism never had a chance to spread in the US. Furthermore, the American Dream provides hope and encourage people to give their best and fulfil their dreams. This can lead to a reduction of the high school dropout rates. I believe that most dreams revolve around one’s happiness and well-being, and this is achievable for all. On the other side, the America Dream might not seem as beautiful as it represents. Most Americans in the current economic time have lost their jobs, homes and financial stability. Today many young children grow up believing that life cannot get better and that their dreams are impossible due to the struggles of economic, crime, and poverty. In fact, high quality schools are very expensive in America. The chances to climb the career ladder are very low and real success is still rare. It seems to me that the American Dream is only possible when there is no poverty in this world. Besides statistics show that African Americans have a lower median income than for example Asian. This means that not everybody has the same opportunities although this is what the Constitution guarantees. Moreover, the emphasis on individual responsibility of the American society can lead to isolation and insecurity. Aside from that, the pursuit of material things leads to disaster, climate change and pollution in the US and the developing world. In conclusion, I would say that I agree only partly with Livian’s statements. In my view, depending on whom you are and what you do for a living, the American dream may be more achievable to some than others.
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.........................of every American citizens(for every American citizen). He also describes the American Dream as the equal(as equal opportunities) opportunities for every American citizens (citizen - das ist doch Singular) to go from “rags to riches” as long as they work hard to achieve aims (to achieve their aims). In the following (What? Essay? Summary?) I will assess Livian’s definition of the American Dream. On one side there are many stories of people who succeeded despite the economy (What about the economy?, In decline? being successful?) crime, poverty, poor education, and less than ideal homes, for example Bill Gates, President Obama, Mark Zuckerberg, etc. This proves that the US society is a classless society, where everybody can move up and succeed and (and your social background)social background does not decide on where you end up. The State has only few influences on each individual(The State has very little influence on the individual). As a matter of fact, communism or socialism never had a chance to spread in the US.(Na, und? Why not) Furthermore, the American Dream provides hope and encourage (and encourages people) people to give their best and fulfil their dreams. This can lead to a reduction of th............
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.......and this is achievable by all... On the other hand, the American Dream might not seem as beautiful as it is made out to be.In the current economic clime many Americans have lost..........lower median income than, for example, Asian (Americans????).....................that not everybody has the same opportunity - although this is what the Constitution guarantees. Moreover, the emphasis on individual responsibility in American society......leads to disasters (Which ones?)...........In conclusion, I would say I agree only partially................In my view, depending on WHO (nicht whom - "wer du bist")..........may be more achievable for some than others.
Das ist nur meine Version, wie es sein sollte. Ich bin sicher, dass Andere es kommentieren werden und vielleicht Fehler finden, welche ich übersehen habe. Übrigens, danke für das "Danke".
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