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Servus Ich muss fünf minuten auf englisch Präsentieren ist der Text so gut oder habt ihr verbesserungs vorschläge Hello everyone my name is Patrick i am sixteen years old and my presentation is about Bill Gates i have four points the first point General information of Bill Gates second point Micrososft thirdly Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation and fourtly Private life Lets start with the first point General information about Bill Gates Bill Gates is the founder of Microsoft and in the list of the richest people of the world on place one His property amounts to eighty five comma three Billions US Dollar Bill was born on the nineteen hundred and fifty five in Seatlle In the year nineteen hundred and ninety four he married Melinda french she also works in IT and they have two daughters and one son Bills hobbies are playing golf and brige his father was a lawyer and his mother was a teacher Bill was a computer freak and his parents were worried about him he could make his driving license at sixteen years and his parents gave him a ford mustang but he was still a computer freak Part secound Microsoft with his school friend Paul allen he wrote nineteen hundred and seventy two programs for companies and so they earned thousands of dollars in a year nineteen hundred and seventy five he cancelled his studies at the Harvard University and with Paul allen established a company trash o dato They were working hard to build a very good Pc the name of the first PC was altair the altair had a memory capacity of fourthousands bytes today the memories have a room of 8 million bytes in nineteen hundred seventy seven they established the company microsoft to make a new operrating system a few years later they had a new system called MS-DOS which is the base of the today famous operrating system windows windows was one the fIrst graphic operating system most people of the world use windows i think with windows bill made a very very important invention But some people say he stole things from apple in twothousandseven he left the company and in twothousandeight he stopped working by microsoft Thirdly part bill and melinda gates foundation this foundation was established in nineteen hundred nintynine and the main focus is the health of the children in africa and asia and also research on aids and last but not least private life bill and his family live in washington he has a grandiose house that cost him one hundred million dollar i want to have a house like this all guests have a chip that saves personal music and photos when his wife goes in a room her favourite music is played in this house has gates twentyfour bathroom s six kitchen a garage with place for twentythree cars a cinema there can twenty persons sit and he has a swimming pool with a underwater soundsystem Zeichenlimit voll kommis schreib ich weiter :D
the construction time of his house was seven years and there work in this time three hundred people the house is near to lake and he can go directly from his house in aboat and go waterskiing all dates will be saved for example the water temperature when he goes into the bathroom and gates say before he dies want he ninety to ninetyfive percent of his property in his foundation donate his children should only zero comma zero two percent of his property get this would be ten millions us dollar we choosen bill gates because we thing he is a grandiose man have you any questions?
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