Kann einer mir sagen ob das richtig ist?
Ich habe ien zusammenfasung über den Film "Step up 3" geschrieben auf Englisch. Ich möchte euch bitten die zu bewerten und Fehler mir zu schreiben.
The movie Step up 3 its about two dance groups the House of Pirates” and “the Samurai”. The captain is Luke Katcher and he find Robert Alexander the third alias “Moose”. Moose studied on the New York University with Camille Gage his best friend. The “Pirates” and the “Samurai” are enemy, because they want to win the “Worldjam”. It is a dance- battle in New York. Before you come in the final, you must win two dance- battles. From the “Pirates” is stolen their choreography and they must started from the beginning. Moose has problems with the training, his study and Camille. Camille is angry on Moose, because he has no time for her. One day come Natalie to the “Pirates”. Natalie is a dancer too and fall in love with Luke. The “Pirates” win two dance- battles and come in the final with the “Samurai”. It is a very strong battles, because the groups are good. And the end the Pirates win the battle and get 250 000 US-Dollar. Luka go with Natalie to Florida. Moose and Camille fall in love.
Dankeschön im vorraus :)
Ein Korrekturvorschlag (vollständiger Text):
The movie Step up 3 is about two dance groups: "The House of Pirates" and "The Samurai". The captain of the "Pirates" is Luke Kacher and he finds Robert Alexander the third alias "Moose". Moose has studied at the New York University with his best friend Camille Gage. The "Pirates" and the "Samurai" are enemies because they both want to win the "Worldjam". This is a dance battle in Now York. Before reaching the finals you must win two dance battles. The Pirates' choreography is stolen and so they have to start again from the beginning. Moose has problems with the training, his studies and Camille. Camille is angry with Moose, because he has no time for her. One day, Natalie comes to the "Pirates". Natalie is a dancer, too, and falls in love with Luke. The "Pirates" win two dance battles and reach the finals where they have to fight the "Samurai". It is a very strong battle, because both groups are good. In the end, the Pirates win the battle and get 250 000 US $. Luke accompanies Natalie to Florida. Moose and Camille fall in love.
Außerdem könnte man an einigen Stellen noch elegantere Formulierungen oder treffendere Wörter wählen. Dass beide Tanzgruppen gut ( "good") sind, ist ja wohl etwas zu allgemein und untertrieben ausgedrückt. Hier könnte man ruhig "fantastic" oder ähnliches sagen.
Über die inhaltliche Richtigkeit habe ich mir keine näheren Gedanken gemacht.
Da sind einige Fehler drin :( Bzw. eig in jedem Satz x( Schickst mir per pn ;) ich kanns korrigieren.