Ist der Text so richtig (Er ist auf Englisch)?

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Ich würde noch "Dear ladies and gentlemen" als Einleitung nehmen. Und vielleicht, wie Du von diesem Angebot erfahren hast und darauf aufmerksam geworden bist. So einne kleinen Anfangsteil, nicht direkt mit der Türe ins Haus fallen. :)
Keine short forms benutzen (anstatt "it's" besser "it is" verwenden)
Kein Komma vor because-Nebensätzen.
Anstatt immer "because" zu verwenden, mal was anderes, z.B. "therefore" oder "since".
Anstatt "giving presentations" wäre "holding presentations" besser.
Aber es ist eigentlich ganz gut, finde es persönlich ein wenig zu dick aufgetragen. Und das "I'm excited" am Ende würde ich weglassen und besser einen schönen Schluss machen :D
z.B.:
I would be happy to hear from you. Please feel free to contact me.
Sincerely,
(dein Name)

Das I'm exited habe ich vollkommen vergessen zu löschen xd, jedenfalls vielen Herzlichen dank, werde deine Anmerkungen sofort in die Tat umsetzen, hat mir wirklich eine Menge geholfen ^^

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Bewerbung per Mail; .zip- und .rar-Format

Hallo.

Heutzutage gestatten ja viele Arbeitgeber eine Bewerbung schlicht und schnell per eMail.

Dabei verwende ich das .rar-Format, welches es erlaubt, mehrere Dateien (.pdfs) zu komprimieren, zu bündeln und anschließend wieder zu entpacken.

Nur stelle ich fest, dass mindestens 30% der Arbeitgeber bzw. Personalsachbearbeiter zu blöd sind, .rar-Dateien zu entpacken.

Dann kommen Mails zurück wie: "..., könnten Sie uns Ihre Bewerbungsunterlagen nochmals als separates .pdf zukommen lassen?"

Nun stelle ich mir wiederum die Frage, ob es zu dick aufgetragen erscheint, wenn ich am Ende der Bewerbungs-eMail eine Art Hinweis oder Link dahingehend einsetze, dass mit winzip oder winrar derartige Anhänge zu öffnen sind ..?

Vielleicht gar ein Tutorial von youtube .. ;-)

Wie seht Ihr das? Wie löst Ihr dieses Problem? Danke!

Frohen Advent!

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englisch- two minute talk- my personal road ahead

Hallo meine Lieben! Ich muss am Mittwoch eine mündliche prüfung über das thema zukunft wie auch bewerbung machen. nun muss ich einen two minute talk über das thema my road ahead machen und wollte wissen was ihr so von dem haltet und ob ihr verbesserungsvorschläge habt :)

Today I’d like to talk about my road ahead so I will tell you, how I’m looking toward to my future. I’ve chosen this topic because, in my opinion, it’s important to think about this and to get clear what I really want to reach and how I imagine my future. I’d like to divide my talk into 4 parts and now, in my first part I want to take a look at my left school time so I will tell you what I want to reach in the left 3 and a half years of school. In this time, I want to get good marks respectively plenty of points during my A-Level with the aspiration getting a lot of acceptances for study places, what brings me very quickly to my second part, where I want you to tell something about my study period, so for example where I want to live during this time. I’m looking forward studying marketing management as a dual study in Düsseldorf because I’m interested in this field of publicity. I decided to live in Düsseldorf because I love this city and the other reason is that I’m near to my family. Then, with a good friend, I decide to live together in a flat share because it isn’t as much as expensive if you’re living in a big flat alone. After my study time I want to work as a marketing manager what brings me to my third part where I want you to tell something about my work aims and how I imagine my hopefully job. As a marketing manager you have to know how to sell products like shoes, dresses or cars and you have to make these products attractive for the costumers. All in all you can say about this job, that you have to promote for different kinds of products. It is important to mention, that I want to live abroad in big cities, let me give you some examples, like Paris or New York City because I’m in love with them. I expect from the job that it is a diversity and also creative job. And my last point is about my personal aims, so if I want to get a family or for example an animal. And this both questions I can answer with the statement yes, because it is my biggest dream getting a family with an attractive man next to me and two children, equal if this will be boys, girls or both. I also want to get a little teacup pig because they’re very cute. I’d like to finish my presentation by summarizing that I want to be a successful worker and a good mum with a lot of aims and that I want to live abroad. That brings me to the end of my presentation, thanks for listening.

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Austauschjahr: Brief an Gasteltern

Hallo liebe Com!

Ich werde ein Jahr in den USA verbringen und muss einen Brief an meine zukünftigen Gasteltern schreiben, was ich auch schon getan habe.Ist der Brief so ok? Gibt es etwas, dass man verbessern könnte/sollte?

Danke im Vorraus!Brief

Dear host family,

First of all I want to thank you that you chose me and I’m very happy that you give me the opportunity to spend one year in the US with you. Now I’d like to introduce myself.

My name is XXXXXX and I was born on May 13th 1998. I’m living in Hanover (525.000 inhabitants) in Germany with my family, that means my parents and my brother Yannick, who is 22 years old and studies in another city, so he is only in his university vacations at home. My mother Uta is 48 years old. She works as an optician and sings in a choir once a week. My father Henning is a key-account-manager. He’s 53 years old and loves rock music.

My family does a lot of sports. My parents play tennis once a week, my brother plays soccer in his university and I play soccer and tennis since I have been six years old , but 2 years ago I quitted playing soccer, because it didn’t make fun anymore and I didn’t have enough time. I still play tennis, which makes a lot of fun and I hope I can continue playing in the US, maybe at my future high school.

One of my favorite hobbies is listening to music. I prefer Rap, Hip-Hop and Pop and I listen to music everyday and I like to listen to music when I’m at home or together with friends.

I think I’m also always well organized, that means I clan my room about once a week and sometimes when I think it’s too messy. The first thing I do when I come home is making my homework. I never had any problems in school and I was always a good student. My secondary language is French, which is with sports, english and maths one of my favorite subjects.

I’m interested to spend a year on the US since my brother came back from his exchange in 2008 and told me how great it was, what he did and that he found a lot of new friends in the US. I’m a member of the YMCA since a few years and I take part at camps every year. I already took part at international camps, where guests from all over the world come to Germany to live with us for 2 weeks. There I met a lot of guys from the US, who told me what’s different in the US and what I have to see when I’m there and that increased my interest.

Now I have the opportunity to live in the US for one year and I want to thank you again for making my dream real. Although I’ll miss my family and my friends when I’m there I really look forward to it.

I can’t wait to see you!

Many Greetings,XXXXX

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Kurzbewerbung; Motivationsschrieben für southern Cross Schüleraustausch ok?

Also ich will mich mit einer Kurzbewerbung bei Southern Cross anmelden und dafür musste ich einen englischen Motivationsbrief schreiben, warum ich weg will und so weiter... wär super wenn ihr ihn mal überfliegen könntet und sagen könntet ib der ok ist? Danke schon mal im Voraus !

Dear Southern Cross team,

My name is _____and in two weeks is my 14th birthday. But in 2018 I would like to celebrate it in Australia.

I´ve thought about if I want to do an exchange a lot and after a one week trip to England where I lived in a host family too, I was sure that I want to do it. I don´t really know how to write this letter without sounding boastful or anything but I think all I can do is to say what I think:

I haven´t got any problem with adjusting other cultures or habits. I mean I don´t yet know the Australian culture, but I haven´t got any problems with things I experienced here in Germany so far. Normaly I´m a confident person, but in a completely new land and school? Well I don´t know how it will be so far away from home and my usual life but on the other hand that´s why I want to do the exchange year. I want to get to know a new culture with new habits and lifestyles. And I hope to find some international friends too. One of my strengths also is that I can get used to circumstances I didn´t like right from the beginning. Sure, that´s all how it works here I Germany and it could be that in Australia everything is different. However I think it´s only human to be a bit afraid of such a big adventure.

There are plenty reasons why I still want to go, even if I´m afraid: For example, as mentioned before, that I want to meet new people and get to know life in a different country. School is another reason. Not only school in Australia, where I hope to be able to study subjects like Surfing or Outdoor Education (I mean how amazing would that be?), but also school in Germany. At my secondary school which is a Gymnasium, I have bilingual English lessons and I´d like to improve my English even further, to do my bilingual A-level and maybe even to study abroad. And apart from these “serious “ reasons , there are just so many opportunities I don´t want to miss. I´ll get the chance for an exchange only one time in my life and I don´t want to sit in class next year thinking “Oh, you could be in Australia now.” When I started to think about doing an exchange, Australia was in my mind right from the start. It has always been my dream designation with its beautiful rainforests, beaches and also the Outback. Sure when I´m there I hope to see as much as possible of the country. Here in Germany I did artistic Gymnastics for 8 and Volleyball for 4 years but maybe there is something that fits better to me.

I really look forward to meet you in person. With best regards, _____

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Englisch Referat über mich und meine Familie! VERBESSERUNG BITTE!

Ich muss ein Referat halten über mich und meiner Familie deswegen wollte ich mal fragen wie ihr das hier findet. Ich würde mich freuen wenn ihr mein Referat verbessert! :))

Mfg. Linda

Hello, my name is Linda G... and I am 16 years old since the 10. April 1997. Now I tell them some things about my family.

I have 1 brother and 1 sister both are younger than me. The name from my brother is Labinot he’s 12 years old. He goes at the Dreifaltigkeits-Mittelschule Amberg. The name from my sister is Shkrute she’s 15, in other words, she enters puberty. She goes to the Luitpoldschule Amberg. My father and my brother have birthday on the same day. My father will be 50.

My mother is 48 years old she has married my father at the age of 25. she couldn't have any children about 7 years. My mother and my father was born in Kosovo. They first went after Kroatia and live there about 4 years because my father has worked there. They live in Kroatia with my oncle and his wife. After 4 years they went to Germany as asylum seekers. First they was in Cham, after then they went amberg. Then I was born.

My family and I live here in Amberg. We life in a beautiful house. At home we speak more Albanian than german. It's very important be able to master his mother tongue, because we visit our home country. We visit every year my related in Kosovo they live in the capital, Prishtina. And we visit Ulqin for 10 days. this is a beach city in Montonegro.

Now I tell them a little about myself and my best friend. In the future i would to work in a büro. I would like have a nice future. The important is that I have a good Job, and a nice family. But first i must have a good school graduation. My favourite hobby is shopping. I love it to buy new clothes. But I have so little money. I'm a stundent and have no money.

I have a best friend. Her name is Isabel she's 15. She has long fair hair. She looks like a Barbie. She is so beautiful. Sometimes she is a bit crazy, but it's very funny. We just laughter every day when we are at school. That's not ok, but we can't otherwise. She is awesome.

THE END.

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englisch tagebucheintrag?

Dear diary, Why, why, why? How should I start? Maybe like this: Dear diary, today, it was the best day in my life by now? I’m feeling very, very, very good? Or I believe I can fly? But no. That would be a lie. A big lie. Better I can write something like that: Dear diary, I’m feeling so bad. My whole life. My whole life will never be the same again? I try to understand why it happened. Why or how did it happen that he react like that? And why do I feel like this now? Maybe I can understand it better when I write it down and think about it. Because I don’t want to be in a situation like this in the moment. Never in life! So first. Do you still know Rob? I’ve told you form this person. Last time. Only good things. But now, you can forget all these things. Or the most of them. So. We wanted to go away. Move to London. Only the two of us. We wanted to live and work there but that was before I noticed that I was pregnant. I told him that I was pregnant, of course. Directly. Although I was extremely afraid of his reaction. And I was right. He said that he wasn’t ready to be a father. Yes I know. But I wasn’t ready to become a mother, too. And I must say. Who is ready to be a mom or a dad with 23? Indeed, an abortion was no question for me! He could go to work. Get the money. Maybe we could marry soon. (At this time I was optimistic. To optimistic.) I tried to change Robs mind. Somehow. That he says yes. Of course. It’s okey. I’ll look after our baby and help you. At last Rob and me we both are guilty. But. No. Of course. He kept saying: “What about my life and my choice?” He thought, we would fight all the time. And an abortion was the best option in our situation. But finally it is my body, my life. So it’s my choice. My choice of I want an abortion or not. All in all he doesn’t came clear (er kam nicht damit klar) that I don’t want to rid of our baby. So he left me. In the 4th month. Pregnant! From that time I don’t speak to him anymore. I hate him for that that he left me alone with the baby. With OUR baby. He said now he feel really guilty about it. But. Yes of course! I only never noticed it before! He was egoistic like a selfish monster which doesn’t care about anyone other. Except him! I don’t think that he think only one time!! Only one time what I’m feeling now. And… No okey I don’t want to become absorbed in this part. So I don’t want to get money from him. He isn’t the father of my daughter. He is only the one who made me pregnant. Now I’m living with my parents. And I really don’t know what I would do without them…

richtige zeit? oder hat jemand verbesserungsvorschläge?

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