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Peter Mortiboy is an industrial apprentice of a luxury car firm which belongs to the Rolls Royce Technical College. The employer fired him because he jeopardized (oder endangered) his co-worker's eyes by use of his four-inch spikes, unusual dress including 18 earrings, studded dog's collar, steel armlets and a stud through his nose. On the one side the boss did right, since it is his firm and if he wants the employees to change their clothes they have to do so, otherwise they would risk their jobs. On the other side**, however,** Peter is a pretty boy who does a great job to boot. He likes how he looks which might be the exact problem, as not every employer is willing to hire him. ........................................................................................................................................

I didn't really get the actual meaning of the first sentence, but I, hopefully, approximated as close as possible to the very sense.

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Peter Mortiboy is an apprentice technician in the luxury car firme and belong to it in the Rolls Royce Technical College ???. But the employer fired him because he has dangered the eyes of his co.wordkers because of his four-inch spikes, unusual dress includes 18 earrings, a studded dog collar, steel armletts and a stud through his nose. On the one side the boss done the right because it is his firme and when he wants that the employees should change his appearance they must do it or maybe they can go work where else. But on the other side is Peter maybe a very pretty boy, works good but he likes how he is looking like and the problem is that not every employer would take him for his work.

So all in all I think Persons who would not change their style for a work should not be sad but they should accept the bosses and change their work. In eine Summary gehört keine eigene Meinung!

Summaries werden in der Regel im Present geschrieben. Handlungen aus der Vergangenheit können aber durchaus auch im Past Simple und Present Perfect stehen.

Die Zusammenfassung eines Sachtextes, der sich mit Geschichte befasst, steht im Simple Past, denn es handelt sich um in der Vergangenheit abgeschlossene Handlungen.

Tipps und Wendungen zu englischen Summaries findest du unter folgendem Link:

http://www.ego4u.de/de/cram-up/writing/summary

AstridDerPu

Cilic16 03.09.2012, 11:18

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@ Cilic16:

Jetzt überleg, wie du die von AstridDerPuh angezeigten Grauslichkeiten besser machen könntest und stell danach den verbesserten Text nochmals herein, dann wollen wir weitersehn, okay?

Ich habe eher weniger Lust den ganzen Text zu überarbeiten, aber achte mal auf die Benutzung von "because" (Eindeutig zu oft!)

LG

ps. : He, she, it; das "s" muss mit! ;D

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