Letter of Motivation. Könnt ihr mal eure Meinung darüber sagen?
Ich weiß nicht, ob ich mit diesem Thema hier an der richtigen Stelle bin. Fals doch, könnt Ihr mal einen Blick auf meinen Letter of Motivation werfen und sagen, was Ihr daran verändern würdet. Verbesserungsvorschläge? Wäre für alles offen. Es geht um die Bewerbung bei einer Uni in Australien.
Beachtet nicht die Paragraphen, die könnten verrutscht sein beim posten, es geht erstmal rein um das Inhaltliche.
To Whom it may Concern,
I hereby wish to state my interest for a place in your Master programme at Bond University.
After graduating from highschool in may 2008, I started studying at Business School Lausanne in Switzerland where I received my Bachelor of Business Administration in November 2010. Looking for the right University, my student councellor has recommended Bond University as a good choice for my further studies.
I am ready to invest into my future and further finalize my degree. Having read about Bond University and after having made my research on the web I am sure that this is the best opportunity to improve both my knowledge and academic skills.
I would like to apply for the MA in Media Management. I am sure that studying at Bond University will bring out the best in me in order to achieve the best result. I realize the highly competitive demands of the program, but I have enough ability, ambition and motivation to cope with the requirements for a successful study at Bond University.
After my studies at Business School Lausanne, I was doing an internship at Avangarde, a consulting & event agency in Shanghai. It was a great experience and I gained a lot of responsibility not only for myself, but also for my fellow colleagues.
My tasks were research, idea creation and outline of various scenarios for a potential marketing campaign for Nike Running in China. Research and creation of sponsoring list of all kinds of sponsors for various porsche events and various administrative tasks.
In conclusion I would like to say that I like to take responsibility and to work as part of a team. I am eager to gain new experiences and in my opinion this program is the best way to achieve that. I am positive that the Bond University would be an excellent start for an ambitious business career.
I am waiting for your kind and positive response. Thank you for your time and consideration. I would be more than happy to provide any further information or documents if required.
Thank you for considering my application