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Was born on THE first of June - and was the daughter of - To care families in orphanage würde ich streichen. - Because of that she spent ... orphanages, where she was abused. To friends of HER family - To be able to leave her family / To finally leave her family - and, as a result, she quit high school - Fours years later they divorced - one of the reasons WAS - in California, where the Photographer David Conover discovered her, and against Jimmy's objections she took up modelling, which has achieved her great fame. She even could be seen on the title pages of famous magazines. - IN June - dyed her hair blonde and changed her name TO Marylin Monroe. She got her first film role in ... - Marylin had a lot of affairs, one of which with John F. Kennedy, the president of the US at the time, but it didn't take long until they broke up. - their marriage FELL apart - she was desperate and weak, therefore she started taking sleeping pills and was admitted to a psychiatric hospital. - and after her DEATH joe ... .

Die gröbsten Fehler sind in Großbuchstaben ausgebessert. Viel Glück bei deiner Eurocom!

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Kommentar von yesichbindu
07.11.2015, 18:15

Vielen lieben Dank

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Marilyn Monroe was born on first (1st) of June (---) 1926 in Los Angeles, California (Ort vor Zeit) as Norma Jeane Mortenson and daughter of a film cutter. Her father is unknown. Norma’s Mother  (RS) Gladys Mortenson couldn’t take care of Norma after her depressions started and she decided to bring (Wort) Norma to care families in orphanage (Ausdruck) . Because of that Norma spent (---) most (---) of her childhood in care families (Ausdruck) and orphanages and (---) was abused. After 1937 (Komma) she moved to friends of their family in Brentwood, California. Later (Komma) she met her 21 years old (RS; Grammar) neighbor (= AE; BE = neighbour) Jimmy Dougherty at the age of 16 and to get rid of the family  (Grammar) they married on June the nineteenth 1942 (= gesprochen; geschrieben June 19th, 1942

Neuer Satz and because of her marriage she quit high school. After four years (Komma; ---) they  (Hier fehlt etwas.) divorced

Neuer Satz one of the reasons were (Grammar) that he was sent to the South Pacific and Norma worked on the assembly-line in California and the photographer David Conover discovered her and Jimmy didn’t want her to do that  (was?) but she preferred her career. (teilen) 

Then she gets (Zeit) model jobs and two years later she was celebrated as a Model (RS) and was to be (Astrid) seen on the title pages  (Wort) of very famous magazines. On (Präposition) June 1946 (Komma) Norma undersigned  (Wort) her first studio contract and started to study acting. Afterwards  (Wort) Norma colored (= AE; BE = coloured) her hair blond and changed her name in  (Präposition) Marilyn Monroe (Komma) and she got her first film role in The Shocking Miss Pilgrim in 1947. Marilyn had a lot of Romances (Wort) too (Komma) one of them (---) with John F Kennedy, the president of the united states in  (Präposition) that time, but it didn’t take  (Hier fehlt ein Wort.) until they have broke up (Zeit) . A while (Wort) later (Komma) in 1954 (Komma) Marilyn met (---) baseball superstar Joe DiMaggio and they married in the same year. After Marilyn became a sex symbol, their marriage fall  (Zeit) apart and they (Hier fehlt etwas.) divorced nine months later. Only two years later in 1956, Marilyn married the writer Arthur Miller. After two miscarriages and her divorce with (Präposition) Arthur, she was desperate and weak

Neuer Satz that’s why she came (Wort) in  (Präposition) a psychiatric hospital and took sleeping pills. Marilyn called her friends to get her out of the hospital and her ex husband Joe DiMaggio was the only one who helped her to get (---) out of the hospital (Wiederholung) . (kürzen oder teilen)

They came (Wort) closer again and (---) wanted to get married again. But then unexpectedly, Marilyn Monroe was found dead on August the fourth (---) 1962  (s.o.) (---) four days before she wanted to get married (Komma) at the age of 36. Marilyn died shortly before midnight in her own house in Brentwood, California. Everyone was shocked and after her dead  (Wortart) Joe has never remarried (Zeit).

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

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Kommentar von yesichbindu
07.11.2015, 18:36

Danke für deine Hilfe, aber irgendwie kompliziert wie du es gemacht hast :D 

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Nicht to get rid of the family sondern to get rid of their families

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Kommentar von yesichbindu
07.11.2015, 00:46

Dankeschön<3

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Kommentar von ShmuelRotkraut
07.11.2015, 09:07

Damit würdest du sagen "Um ihre Familien loszuwerden" - Und zwar im Sinn von "töten".

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