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The Great Barrier Reef is a fantastic place. You can see many animals: Corals, fishes, dolphins, Wales (liegt auf den britischen Inseln und ist kein Tier) and jellyfishes. Some people think that corals are plants, but it is false. Corals are also animals, how (---) fishes in the water. You see, you can learn many.

The Great Barrier Reef is longer than the great wall. It is the longest reef in the world. The area from the Great Barrier reef is 344,400 cm2 large.

Also (kein Satzanfang) you can make many activities (Word Order), for example, snorkeling (= AE; BE = snorkelling) and diving. Under the water it is beautiful (Satzstellung). The colors (= AE; BE = colours) from (falsche Präposition) the fish(--) and the corals, you must see (---) - (Satzstellung).

There is a very old coral. It is 1000 years old. Besides is there (word order) a dangerous fish (for everybody), the “box jellyfish”. The “box jellyfish” is so dangerous kein Komma because whose venom can kill a person may within a few minutes.

That is why you must hier fehlt ein Verb very carefully

kein Komma

then you snorkel and all time. But there is also a disaster. The Great Barrier Reef will die kein Komma because there are so many plastic litters.

Thankfully

we have the organization “Marine Debris”. They clean the water and save the Great Barrier Reef. It is interesting for tourism. You can make a boat tour**, then** you can see the reef under water and what (---) “Marine Debris” do for the reef. But there are also (---) animals kein Komma

those survive because of the organization “Marine Debris”.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.eu,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.

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Einige Korrekturen:

whales, jellyfish....

like the fish in the water

You see that you can learn a lot when... (man was macht???)

Great Wall

can do a lot activities...

Everything under the surface of the sea is beautiful...

he colours** of** the fish(es)

That is why you must be very careful...

The area** of** the.. is 355,400 sq km

because there is so much plastics litter in the area...

.. animals** which survive** because of...

Es sind noch mehr Fehler in deinem Text, der übrigens auch besser strukturiert sein sollte. Du springst zu sehr von Thema zu Thema.

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Corals, fishes, dolphins, Wales and jellyfishes. Some people think that corals are plants, but they're wrong. Corals are animals too, like fishes in the water. You see, you can learn much. The Great Barrier Reef is longer than the great wall. It is the longest reef on the world. The area from the Great Barrier reef is 344,400 cm2 wide. Also you can do many activities, for example snorkeling and diving. You have to see the colors of the fishes and the corals. There lives a very old coral. It is 1000 years old. Besides, there is a dangerous fish called the “box jellyfish”. The “box jellyfish” is vers dangerous, because itsvenom can kill a person within a few minutes. That is why you have to be very carefully, when you snorkel. But there is also a disaster. The Great Barrier Reef will die, because there are so many plastic litters. Thankfully we have the organization “Marine Debris”. They clean the water and save the Great Barrier Reef. It is interesting for tourism. You can make a boat tour and you can see the reef under water and what the “Marine Debris” do for the reef. But there are also the animals, those survive because of the organization “Marine Debris”.

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Kommentar von Xaito
04.09.2013, 14:51

das ist jetzt so grob korriegiert, mal satzzeichen fehler etc. ausgenommen

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he Great Barrier Reef is a fantastic place. You can see lots of animals: Coral, fish, dolphins, jellyfish and Wales. Some people think that corals are plants, but it is wrong. Corals are animals, like fish in the water. You see, you can learn a lot. The Great Barrier Reef is longer than the Great Wall. It is the longest reef in the world. The area of the Great Barrier Reef is 344,400 cm2. Also you can enjoy many activities include snorkeling and scuba diving. Underwater it is beautiful. The colors of the fish and the coral, you have to see it. It is a very old corals. It is 1000 years old. In addition, there is a dangerous fish for those "box jellyfish". The "box jellyfish" is so dangerous because their venom can kill a person within minutes. Therefore, you must very carefully and then snorkeling all time. There are also a disaster. The Great Barrier Reef will die, because there are so many litters of plastic. Fortunately, we have the organization "Marine Debris". They purify the water and save the Great Barrier Reef. It is interesting for tourism. You can take a boat tour, then you can see the reef under water and what the "Marine Debris" do for the reef. But there are also the animals that survive because of the organization "Marine Debris".

Plural von Fische im englischen fish. Ebenso jellyfish. Zudem einige kleine Formulierungsfehler.

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