Frage zum Text von Tony Blair 'The Commonwealth today' Summary
Hey, also wir müssen zu dem Text 'The Commonwealth today' von Tony Blair eine Summery schrieben. Ich habe den Text leider nciht ganz verstanden und wollte Fragen ob ihr mir sagen könnet, ob die Summary die ich dazu geschireben habe einigermaßen gut ist.
Hier ist die Summery die ich geschrieben habe:
The text 'The Commonwealth Today', which Tony Blair delivered at the opening of the Commonwealth Parliamentary Association Conference on 21 September 2000 at Westminster Hall, deals with the fact that the countries of the Commonwealth can solve a lot of problems if they stick together.
Tony Blair explains, that the Commonwealth is not just a group of countries which connects by the friendship. There is also an organisation that can eliminate a lot of problems and strengthen the democracy in the member countries. Furthermore, it is encourages the rule of law and human rights. The following Tony Blair tries to make clear that by Commonwealth also an improvement in the economic and social reform is possible and a permanent exit debt for the poorest countries is in question. One should bear in mind that the Commonwealth has already made great contributions in terms of trade, environment, investment and education. And therefore it would be a possible answer to fight against the devastating social and economic impact of HIV an AIDS. He hopes, that Commonwealth will be evolved and leads to a strengthening of cohesion and cooperation between the countries.
Freue mich über eine Idee, Tipps, Verbesserungsvorschläge.... Danke =) glg bej
1) Bitte "summary"! (mit a !!!). 2) Korrekturen: The speech that.... (kein Komma!!!) .... KEIN KOMMA nach "explains"!!! .... countries which is connected by friendly relations .... It is also.... that can** solve** a lot of ... Furthermore, it promotes and encourages human rights and democratic law....
In the following part of the speech... .... that the Commonwealth also encourages economic and social reform .... and that a** permanent release from debts ... is being considered.** .. People should bear in mind.... contributions to ... He hopes that ... (KEIN KOMMA!!!!) ... the Commonwealth will be further developed, which would result in the strengthening of ....
(Ob die summary dem Text entspricht und ganz gerecht wird , kann ich leider nicht beurteilen).
Super vielen Dank. Ich bin leider nicht so gut in englisch. Danke für deine Hilfe ;) glg bej