English Correction ✍🏼️💪🏻?
Hallo, habe hier meinen Englisch Text über "sponsorship". Mein Problem: Habe ihn schon meinem Lehrer abgegeben und dafür ne 5 bekommen. Aber wenn ich in verbessere habe ich noch Chancen auf eine bessere Note. Habe ihn jetzt verbessert aber bin mir immer noch nicht sicher ob es passt. Könnt ihr ihn vielleicht mal durchlesen, und nach Fehler überprüfen? Danke und liebe Grüße
Hier mein Text:
Sponsorship Request Letter (201 words)
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is ......... I visit the HAK-Bregenz and I also make an education as a sport introducer. In my future I will organize spezial sports events for charity.
As a school project I want organize a run from the Landesbibliothek Vorarlberg up tot he Pfänder mountain. This event is a very special run in Vorarlberg to donate the poor people in Africa. There are a lot of people who are going to run with us, we invited the Sportgymnasium Dornbirn and many other schools. There are going to participate different companies who want to make a charity.
So, as you can see many of people are going to come to this event! But we don’t have many sponsoring companies. So perhaps you want give me an amount of money then I can make promotion for your company.
I would like to propose what types of sponsorship you can do: positive publicity through signs, banners and logos on water bottles, ballons, pens or something else.
I hope you can help us with your sponsorship! Thanks you in antipication for your contribution to our good work.
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is XYZ. I visit the HAK-Bregenz. I study to become a sport instructor. In my future, I want to organize special sporting events for charity.
As a school project I want organize a run from the Landesbibliothek Vorarlberg up to the Pfänder Mountain. This special event is meant to collect money, which we/I plan to donate to (what exactly? What organization? Man spendet nicht an "die armen Schwarzen"). There are a lot of people who are going to participate; we invited the Sportgymnasium Dornbirn and many other schools. A variety of companies have also pledged to donate.
So, as you can see, many people are going to come to this event! While many donations have already been promised, we do however need sponsors to help cover the costs of the event. Therefore, we/I would greatly appreciate if your company could, in exchange for advertisement and free press, give money to help us/me with our/my endeavor.
This sponsorship could include banners, balloons and buttons.
I hope to hear back from you to discuss details, as we/I would love very much to work with you on this. I thank you in advance for taking the time to think about this and hopefully for your contribution to our good cause.
Super, vielen Dank das du dir Zeit genommen hast!!!