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After my A-levels i

want to do a gap year abroad. I am particulary interested in this job as I want to support an organisation which lobby for people who live on the edge of our society. Living in the USA hier fehlt etwas pretty hard for them because the do not get any welfare so they depend on volunteers. Moreover Komma I want to study social pedagogic. And thus i would have the opportunity to combine my interests with this placement. I expect from my gap year to experience a new lifestyl and culture. In addition Komma I want to socialise with different people and collecting unforgettable impressions.

I did a work experience in a home for the handicapped and went on a private catholic school for 10 years. Moreover Komma I am part of a soccerclub. On many Sundays Komma I had to barbecue and selling sausages while my team is playing soccer. I am also in a comitee which organize events or other different things like barbecuing, washing the tricots, drinving to away games.

I had been to South Africa for 3 weeks with my family. My aunt is a nun in an abbey near bloemfontain so we spent a quite a long time in the abbey. I worked in a kindergarten which is under the direction of the abbey. We visited a school which is also under the direction of the abbey and distribute milk to the pupils.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.eu,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.

:-) AstridDerPu

alex1302 28.10.2012, 16:20

Hallo! Danke erstmal für die Kontrolle, konnte aber viele fettgedruckten Wörter nicht nachvollziehen ;) Hier mal die Überarbeitete Version von mir:

After my A-levels I am willing to do a gap year abroad. I am particularly interested in this job as I want to support an organization which intervenes on people who live on the edge of our society. Living in the USA is pretty hard for them because they do not get any welfare so they depend on volunteers. Moreover, I want to study social pedagogic. And thus I would have the opportunity to combine my interests with this working experience. I expect on my gap year to experience a new lifestyle and culture. In addition, I want to socialize with different people and collecting unforgettable impressions.

I did a work experience in a home for the handicapped and went on a private catholic school for 10 years. Moreover, I am in a football club. On many Sundays, I had to barbecue and selling sausages while my team is playing soccer. I am also in a comitee which organize events or other different things like barbecuing, washing the tricots, drinving to away games.

I have been to South Africa for 3 weeks with my family. My aunt is a nun in an abbey near Bloemfontein so we spent quite a long time at the abbey. I worked in a kindergarten which is conducted by the abbey. We visited a school which is also conducted by the abbey and distribute milk to the pupils.

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AstridDerPu 30.10.2012, 18:09
@alex1302

Schön, dass dir meine Antwort (trotzdem) gefallen hat und danke für das Sternchen!

:-) AstridDerPu

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Living in the USA pretty hard : da fehlt das "is" drinving to away games: driving* hast du das überhaupt durchgelesen man?

alex1302 28.10.2012, 15:38

jop haste recht, kann es nur nicht mehr umändern

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