Kann bitte jemand diesen englischen Text kontrollieren?
Hallo Liebe Community! Ich mache sehr bald ein Austauschjahr und habe einige Fragen beantworten müssen (natürlich auf englisch) und habe mich gefragt ob die eventuell jemand korrigieren kann, bzw. mich auf Fehler hinweisen könnte. Ich werde dazu noch mehr Fragen stellen, da ich nicht alles in einer unterkriege.
During the week, I usually get up around 6 am. I have to admit, I love my bed so getting up is not always that easy for me, but once I am one my feet, nothing can stop me! After I was in the bathroom and got dressed, I go into our kitchen, where my mother prepares breakfast for me and my brother. My dad's normally already out for work. He is self-employed so he needs to work a lot, but when he is at home, it's like he has never been away. My school bus arrives at 6:38 and my school starts at 7:25. I love my school class, I get along with all my classmates so well and I have made some really good friends there. I also have some very good friends that are a few years older than me so during the lessons I often hang around at other classes, too. School usually ends at 1 pm, so I arrive at home around 2 pm, depends on wether my mother or my father pick me up from school or I have to take the bus. After school my family and I have lunch together. Sometimes we all help together cooking or my mother is doing it on her own. She is very good at cooking and often doesn't want us to mess up her delicious meals she prepares. After we shared our daily highlights or talked about other important or not so important stuff, I go to my room to take some time off. School is very exhausting sometimes and I am often very tired after I get home. I try to relax a bit, often with a book in my hand but also often with just taking a nap. When I am not tired anymore, I always try to immediately do as much homework as I can, because I hate the feeling when I know that there is something that isn't completely done. At days where I do not have to study for a test or prepare something for school that would take me longer, I hang out with friends or family. My best friend Miriam and I love to do some sports, we often hit the gym together or go for a run. I also love to spend time with my elder brother Armin, who is 21. We love watching some series together like Game of thrones or he teaches me martial arts. I couldn't imagine a life without my brother, and I hope that I'll also have some host siblings in the US, because I think having siblings is something really important. I normally go to sleep at around 11 pm, although I try to go to bed earlier, because I am always so tired in the morning.
but once I am one my feet -> on statt one
After I was in the bathroom and got dressed, I go into our kitchen, where my mother prepares breakfast for me and my brother -> falsche Zeitform ( du brauchst Past Perfect)
I love my school class -> wenn du sagen willst, dass du den Unterricht magst, ist der Satz richtig. Wenn du sagen möchtest, das du deine Mitschüler magst, dann nicht.
Sometimes we all help together cooking -> ohne together
like Game of thrones -> Thrones großschreiben, da Eigenname
Grundsätzlich würde ich die abbreviations (it's, he'd) ausschreiben, da es in einem Schreiben schöner und professioneller wirkt. Ansonsten gehst du oft ins simple past, was man in Zusammenfassungen nicht macht. Entweder simple present oder past perfect verwenden. (siehe oben als Beispiel)
Viel Spaß im Austausch!