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The White House has 132 rooms, 35 bathrooms, 412 doors, 147 windows, 8 staircases, a tennis court, 3 elevators and much more; there is a cinema and bowling alley though Barack Obama ordered that the basketball court be better equipped. The East Room is the largest in the White House. There are receptions, press conferences, concerts and balls. The apartment of the president’s family is on the second floor. The offices of the president are in the outbuildings. There too is the first lady and her stuff. (‘Da ist auch die First Lady und ihr Zeug’ - was meinen sie damit?) The White House has several gardens: the north lawn of the White House, the South Lawn of the White House, the White House Rose Garden and the Jacqueline Kennedy Garden. Every year (since 1923) in the Advent season the National Christmas Tree is at the White House. The White House is pictured on the back of the $ 20 bill. The White House is very well guarded: it's one of the best protected buildings in the world, and also has the most advanced security systems. You need a permission to fly over White House area, and there is an air raid shelter under the East Wing, from where the count(r)y – (Meinen sie das Land(country) oder das Bundesland(county)?) can be controlled in special situations. On the 11th September 2001, during the terrorist attacks, the White House was evacuated for the first time in history. Snipers were placed everywhere, and area cameras and sensors were spread across a wide area. The Secret Service and Park Police guard the building at all times. The East room is used for press conferences, receptions, balls, or large dinners. The East room is probably the best known space, having been featured on television and in the media. It is used for private events and officer goals.

Ich bin Engländer, und obwohl mein Englisch gut ist weiß ich nichts über das Weise Haus. Wo möglich habe ich deine fahle korrigiert, aber ob ich dich richtig verstanden habe weiß ich nicht. Allerdings ist dein Englisch prima – so viel kann ich nicht auf Deutsch schreiben.

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The White House has 132 rooms, 35 bathrooms, 412 doors, 147 windows, 8 staircases, a tennis court and 3 elevators. You can do many things there. (Die Sätze hab ich umgestellt, da es ein wenig seltsam klingt, dass es dort neben den "tollen" Fenstern, Fahrstühlen und Treppenhäusern auch andere Sachen gibt, die man machen kann ;) There is a cinema and a bowling alley. Barack Obama ordered that the basketball court hast to be (?) better equipped. The East Room is the largest room in the White House. There are receptions, press conferences, concerts and balls. The apartment of the president's family is on the second floor. The offices of the presidents are in the outbildings. There are also the first lady and her stuff. The White House has several gardens: the North Lawn of the White House, the South Lawn of the White House, the White House Rose Garden and the Jacqueline Kennedy Garden. Every year (since 1923), in the advent season, there is the National Christmas Tree at the White House. The White House is pictured on the back of the $ 20 bill. The White House is very well guarded, it is one of the best protected buildings of the world, it also has the most advanced security systems. You need a permission to fly over the area of the White House. There is an air raid shelter under the East Wing, from where you can control the county in special situations. On 11th September 2011, during the terrorist attacks, the White House has been evacuated for the first time in history. Snipers were placed everywhere, and there are camaras and sensores on a wide area. The Secret Service and Park Police guard the building at any time. East Room: Used for press conferences, receptions, balls, or large dinner. From television and the media room of the East is probably the best known space (verstehe den Satz nicht). It is used for private events and officer goals.

Ich habe sicher nicht alle Fehler gefunden (vor allem die mit seltsamen Ausdruck). Du solltest darauf achten nicht ständig "White House" zu schreiben, da nach drei Sätzen jeder weiß, worum es geht. Umschreibe solche Ausdrücke mit "it" oder einfach "the house", "the building" oder "the complex".

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The White House has 132 rooms, 35 bathrooms, 412 doors, 147 windows, 8 staircases, a Tennis court, 3 elevators and you can do there many other things (Word Order, Ausdruck, Zusammenhang: man kann dort viele andere Dinge machen außer 132 Zimmer, 35 Bäder ...)

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there is a cinema and a bowling alley,

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Barack Obama ordered that the basketball court is better equipped. The East Room is the largest room in the White House.

There are receptions, press conferences, concerts and balls instead (anstatt ???).

The apartment of the presidents family is on the second floor. The offices of the presidents are in the outbildings.

There are also the first lady and her stuff.

The White House has several gardens: the north lawn (---), the South Lawn (---), the White House Rose Garden and the Jacqueline Kennedy Garden.

Every year (since 1923) in the Advent season (hier fehlt ein Wort) is (Zeit) at the White House the National Christmas Tree (Satzstellung).

The White House is pictured on the back of the $ 20 bill.

The White House is very well guarded, it's one of the best protected buildings of the world, it also has the most advanced security systems. (Stil)

You need a permission to fly over the area of the White House, there is an air raid shelter under the East Wing, there you can control the county in special situations. On 11 During the September 2011 terrorist attacks, the White House has been (Zeit) evacuated for the first time in history. Snipers were (Zeit) placed everywhere, and there are on a wide area camaras and sensores (Satzstellung). The Secret Service and Park Police guards the building at any time.

East room - Used for press conferences, receptions, balls, or large dinner.

From television and the media room of the East is probably the best known space (Ausdruck) (Satzstellung). It is used for private events and officer goals (Ausdruck).

Du solltest bei den Satzanfängen (The White House, There is) und bei den Verben (has) variieren.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.eu,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.

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