Englisch Text korrekt? ..

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Also, ich hab jetzt versucht, deinen Text mit Anmerkungen zu korrigieren, aber das klappt nicht. Da sind zu viele Fehler. Daher:

  1. Ort vor Zeit, ich weiß bescheid! - nimm dir die Regel zu Herzen und stell deine Sätze um. Den Gefallen tu ich dir nicht, damit lernst du nämlich nix. :) Nicht bös gemeint.

  2. Es ist "came", nicht "camed", "flew" nicht "flied", "fell" nicht "falled", "were born" nicht "was borned"

  3. "my grandfather and grandmother" - kürz ab. "grandparents".

  4. Es heißt "got TO knew", schöner ist aber: They met each other.

  5. "could'nt"

  6. "Then they moveD to" (das Ereignis liegt in der Vergangenheit!)

  7. "he siblings of my grandfather " - schöner: "my grandfather's siblings"

  8. vor because kein Komma, bitte.

  9. nicht they "established" a family. Das ist zu..businessmäßig. They "raised" a family.

  10. "A few years later, ..."

  11. "At the age of 8, my mother..", "When she was 17, she went on a vacation to Turkey.."

  12. "They got to know each other.." (auch dieses Event liegt in der Vergangenheit!)

  13. nach to kommt immer ein Infitiniv! Ausnahme: I'm looking forward to hearing.. (Das ist eine Phrase in einem BEwerbungsschreiben)

  14. "I was born in..", das zweite I in dem Satz kannste streichen.

  15. "That's"

  16. "And now she's 8 years old."

  17. Kleiner Tipp zum Schluss: Vermeide Shortforms. In der geschriebenen Sprache ist es immer schöner, die Sachen auszuschreiben. :)

Huch.. :)

5.: "couldn't" - da ist mir das Apostroph verrutscht.

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Schau dir mal deine Zeiten an, "camed" gibt es nicht

Hi, Ich berichtige nur die groben Fehler, so dass das Werk wetier auch deins ist. Ich denke´, dass ist in deinem Sinne :-)

1964 my forefather camed to Germany for work, because Germany needed workers at this time. He wanted to earn money and get his family to Berlin. 1969 his family came to Berlin, too and they lived there for a while. They flew back to Turkey for holidays and my grandfather and grandmother got to know each other and they fell in love. They married, but they lived in Turkey for a few months, because my grandmother couldn't move to Germany. Then they moved to Berlin and in 1976 my mother was born. My foreparents and the siblings of my grandfather moved back to Turkey, but my grandfather and his sister wanted to stay in Berlin, because they established their own families. A few years later my aunts and my uncle were born. With 8 years my mother wanted to live in Turkey, because she missed her grandmother. She lived there for 2 years, but she missed her family and she moved back to Germany. When she was 17 she took a vacation in Turkey, where my father has fallen in love with my mother. They got to know each other and a year later they married. My mother had to return to Germany without my father, because he hadn't got his visuum. But a year later he was supported to moving here and they lived together. 1998 I was born and I wanted a little sister and thats why I had been crying every night. 2005 my wish camed true. I got a little sister. Her name is Zehra and she's now 8 years old.

Du solltest nochmal die unregelmäßigen Verben wiederholen - da scheinst du noch ein paar Schwächen zu haben.

Alles Gute für dich :-)

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