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The novel Zero written by the Austrian Marc Elsberg is a Crime Thriller (RS)
and took place (Zeit) in the near future. In his novel ZERO writes Marc Elsberg (Word Order) from (Präposition) big enterprises who (Relativpronomen) collect worldwide data of Internet users. They evaluate the data and use them for (Hier fehlt ein Possessivpronomen) own purposes. The history begins
with an attack on the American president. With the help of a drone the
video recordings were provided
. (Satzstellung; Zeit) The president and his family are attacked by drones.  By the video recordings the whole world can pursue (Wort) the attack live. (Satzstellung)

For this action confesses ZERO responsibly (Verb, Satzstellung) and (Hier fehlt ein Wort.) is not known whether it is a concerns (Grammatik; kein Komma) or an individual or a grouping.

Cynthia Bonsant is a journalist of (Präposition) the transmitter (Wort) DAILY. Cynthia gets the job to collect information about the attack. To the support (Ausdruck) she receives data glasses (kein Komma) that data registers (Subjekt-Verb-Bezug) directly in front of her eyes (Satzstellung). With the help of these glasses (Komma) she can find out information about people. She
lends the glasses (Hier fehlt eine Präposition) her daughter. Adam, one of the friends of Cynthias (Grammatik) daughter, receives the news (Wendung) about (Präposition) the glasses that a person (kein Komma) in his surroundings (kein Komma) by the police is searched. (Satzstellung)

He pursues (Wort) the man. The man notes (Verb) the pursuit (Wort) and shoots Adam with a gun. The death of Adam (RS) leads the journalist Cynthia to the popular Internet platform Freemee. This collects and analyses data of the (besser Possessivpronomen) users. Freemee promises the user the (besser Possessivpronomen) a better life and more success.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

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AstridDerPu

Die ersten 5 Sätze:

1. Satz :takes place

2.: worldwide an den schluss, writes hinter das Subj, which collect

4. Story, starts

Hallo,

1. criminal thriller, nicht crime thriller

2. takes place

3. In his novel zero Marc Elsberg writes, nicht writes....

4. enterprises which

5. track, nicht pursue. Pursue nur im Kontext von z.B. einem Hobby: to   pursue a hobby, to pursue a trade, to pursue a lifestyle....

6. Der Satz " For this action confesses ZERO responsibly and is not known whether it is a concerns, or an individual or a grouping." macht keinen Sinn. Überarbeite diesen nochmal, hier passen die Wörterverwendung und der Satzbau nicht.

7. am besten das "out" bei find weg lassen, oder aber: find out about...

8. She lends the glasses TO her daughter

9. via the glasses not about

10. is searched by the police, nicht by the police is searched

Alles andere ist gut. Gut gemacht :)

Viel Erfolg!

Liebe Grüße

phildoc

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